GameDay - Ft. DB
 

I used that beat Enygma gave me For Gametime or w/e....... and one day my friend was hearin it and wanted to write sumthin to it.... so it goes him first, and me second... my verse is really short... i actually have another verse i was gonna do to send to Enygma, but this is wat me and one of my boys did while he was over.... hope u enjoy! :thumbup:

http://www.soundclick.com/olascript...utmynamesgalant

I gave feed In Enygma Gametime, and in CarsonJets Track too...

uppin maybe?????

leave feedback on songs lol

^^^ ahh i did.... i juss didnt leave links.....

lol this beat is thight
first rapper,no very intonation,bad quality,no hate
second,way better,nice flow,nice voice,fitting on the beat,yah im feelin this verse


return the favor: stay like you are

too lazy to do more than just up it right now......... ill leave alotta feed soon for other people so i dont needa up

FUCK YALL BITCHEs..... :gfy: lol

I felt the introduction could of been stronger, but atleast u had one....


aight bro flow wasn't bad could of been better but that it seemed pretty constant... the thing that really needs work in my opinion homie is the mic presence and emotion that you are delivering throught out the track... it was kind of too laid back like if youre gonna fall asleep ... feel me??? anyway instead of that lyrical content is still pretty nice man... just need to work on your emotion


Draxe

peace

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thanx for the feed.........

I'm feeling this shit man.......first guy needs a little work with his flow and emotion. This was supposed to be a get hype track, except he didn't get hype. Fux came pretty nice. I liked the emotion and the content. Whenever you finish your version you wanted to send me, let me know.......I'll add it to mine :thumbup:

first guy... he's not tryin hard enough... or if he's gonna go laid back he needs more of a personality on the track, more pronounciation, more presence... when fux comes on, your presence is much better, your were much more into your verse... keep improving on this aspect and your diction while spitting, keep the focus... 1.

First guy sounds kinda like he isnt putting much effort into his delivery, he sounded half asleep.. Or maybe he was trying to be quiet when he recorded?.. Fux you sound aiight.. Multies were nice, you had better flow and delivery.. I think that you both need work on making better music thats more into it as opposed to just writing 2 verses for a track.. I didnt notice any hook or into or out tro..

And you also left a long time on the tape after ur finished rapping.. Which tells me you need a lot of work on your mixing skills.. Play around with the features on cool edit a lot more and learn some producing techniques..

i remember rapping on this beat did a diss to this cat...aight this is a responses to both flow was kinda ehhh for ...needs some work...delivery is boring...clarity needs some work...lyric were aight...why is it playing silent for almost a minute....overall i wasn't really feelin this joint right here...peace


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