some shit I wrote while listening to Pun
 

U get marked for death, take Ur heart for breath/
I pack the Fo' Pound,
Kick the door down then whatch U start to stress/
Yes, Forgive Me lord
But Iv been on the board since My comadore 64
done first hit the fucking floor-
Im sicker then anything Uv ever seen befor/
My team is more then raw,
compared to all of you'll, we run the law
first to blast and last to fall,
cus I dont give a fuck at all till the last straw/
We ball like niggaz dunking off the wall

it'z cool & evathang 4 a quick spit but elevate in ur next open mic might sure 2 return the favor in my open mic & 2 battles

thanx for the feed back, i'll try next time

Yo This Was An Ight Peace Here Not Great But Not Whack Rhymes Were A Lil Basic At Times Structre Was Preety Good A Very Unique Way To Structre It 6.5/10
Please Rtf In My Open Mic "bitterphobia" Link In My Sig