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intensify effect vs Durban
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Topical- eternal damnation 20-25 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 02-17-05 at 02:48 AM Must drop verse in 360 minutes after check in. |
Durban has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-17-05 12:25 AM.
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intensify effect has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-17-05 12:39 AM.
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eternal damnation
will we continue to break the seals of seven will he once and for all close the gates of heaven? he will dispose of all good,ending every creation This is my story,of eternal damnation............ Seven angels burning as they fall,simply unspoken Thier harps silent and unused,simply just broken Heavens ingulfed in flames,holy churches tumbling down As The Throne of god Is usurped by death's crown No such thing as judgment day,its now been denied All unworthy of the dark shall perish,its impossible to hide Desolate eyes ascend In hate,all evil starts to show the white light is now black,and the red starts to glow Humans falling into the depths below,no reason to fight Shadowed by dark clouds,no rememberance of light As people start to bask and glorify the heat of hell We turn into weeping mortals that will forever dwell Our souls shall never rest,but be forever serving the devil endliss torment awaits,death seems paused never to prevail as demons rip into your flesh,to expose your inner self you relise you should of praised god,and he would of delivered your wealth |
eternal damnation
Pain inflicted through emotions given... Soul is positioned to scream though my throat is missin *wah*... Envision a mind vs a talent.. in a voice box entrenched in a vine... Then u will find a dilemma just as simple as mine... insight like a blind monk, word patterns wanderin' the mountainsides... cuz with all my reason and truth, even i lose my footing at times.. I suffer cuz I favor verbs and fatal words... But vocally my cords are stressed more than laid off laborers... wont stop till im niled-to-da-curv, feels like hitler soul grabb'in-me... rapedly making ya dicks drop to the floor like u was being SUCKED by gravity... u would think guns, knifes and accidents causes casualties... but these forces beyond what we all have been practicing... witch craft, voo-doo, with bones gift-raped... what a tragedy... pop'ed opticals for trash reading of ya topicals..slugs u had to see.. BITCH!, claps when i strut through the door gashes bust through my pores... The Face of Durban Slapped to the Cutting room Floor... coward is taimed, but my enternal feelings are killing me... skin peeling from the sins in me frightning lighning reeling on agility... on the heels of achilles as my pride bested my think modes... i can conquer all of rap N still wont think smooth... till aint no-one left to be next to lose, i feel there still complication... and this my 1st topical drop, imagen what i have instored befor my enternal damnation......... BITCH... N i can bet u been had ya verse pre-wrote....... peep.... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=176415 ^^ that was on 2-10-05.... its 2-17-05 mmmm what a shame... good luck with ya pre-written bull-shit... mines took me 1 hr tops... whatever upp'in for ya pre witten.... |
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your drop isnt even on topic.
bitch???? your speaking like you dropped dope...its wak. |
^^^^ bitch u acting like u just wrote that when u been had it prepaired N pre-written already bitch.....
and i told u and everyone in my tread i dont do topicals.... this is my first topical battle and yes it is about the topic: enternal danmnation, why u said it aint a topical? just cuz i aint have to do it about god and evil and whatever else u pre-wrote....?? its ova coming a flow or ego or mastering something anything or taking ova something all that is part of enternal danmnation bitch so hop off my nuts....... if u read my verse again then maybe u will get it other then that hop off my nuts with ya bull-shit u probley bit awhile back bitch....... |
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thanks for writing that whole paragraph for me
but I failed to read it seen as you cant spell upping |
Voted For: Durban
durban- ur verse was good...u stayed on topic the whole way thru, also had good creativity..vocab & structure was on point..u get my vote cuz i feel ur topic verse was betta & overall was to 9.0/10 intensify effect- ur verse was good also but not good enough..u stayed on topic..ur structure was off it needs 2 b fixed up..but overall u did good but not good enough 6.5/10 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
sorry 2 freepost in ur battle but make sure 2 return the favor
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This was feedback posted for Durban
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^^ Nigga Trying To Be Like Me
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