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Sunburned.....(hot shit)
Here I rest, wide-awake in my bed, un-knowing of what I saw
For real, it was in my opinion of an angel sent from God Just so striking, more than a ray of sunshine in my eyes The way it glimmered and reflected, true exquisiteness disguise ……. I dreamt about it, philosophized, and conceived crafty tactics Because in the end, I knew I couldn’t live with out us mixed My mind cannot mend, a simple observation, obsessed Thoughts couldn’t spend, brain vacated, nothing mentally left Words I couldn’t comprehend, created, music without a cleft. ……… Eyes indignant and burned just looking at her Her astounding radiance left me, a disease without a cure Fanatical thoughts grew inside, a smouldering desire I tried to hide Something only found deep in-hide, a heart my only guide …….. Primal instincts rampant, raging bull stuck in a ring of red Beats inside me, bombs over Baghdad, within me constricted Never mess with love, is a lesson learned, because the moment My eyes set on you, I was sunburned…… drop a link with-in 24 hours or this will be closed... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165166 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170910 |
O dayum!
Nice shit. Vocab was nice in this verse. Flowed good. Imaginary was nice Emotion, needs more emotion. Eitherway this a good drop fam, keep it up 8/10 |
Thanks appreciate the feed!
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Thanks for the feedback all!
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