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monkeypoet 07-23-02 11:17 PM

new style for me: trial day
 
how can u confess ur depression to others
if you cant admit it to yourself
the acceptance of myself flees
everytime im close to grasping it

the words are soundless
but the thoughts scream
a battle from side to side
is it true or just a fleeting feeling?

when trial day comes
the mirror is the door
guilty or not guilty
the refection as my judge

and suddenly the verdict seems clear
and the tears, placid fall fast and sudden
making pools in my palms in which i catch them in
puddles of truth and windows to my soul

i throw the tears at the mirror
and the pane of glass ripples with purity
for the tears are the absolute truth
of what my fate holds

miz kitta 07-25-02 05:14 PM

wow.... that was deep... well written... i was feelin it the whole way through

i throw the tears at the mirror
and the pane of glass ripples with purity
for the tears are the absolute truth
of what my fate holds

i can find really a lot of truth in what you are saying... and really connected sum feelings w/ these words... great drop~Peace

monkeypoet 07-26-02 10:22 PM

thanks leah... dammit people, just because it doesnt rime doesnt mean u need to sleep on it..please...

blackmoon 07-28-02 08:49 AM

well i see u r still preaching truth & pure emotions my fellow poet/
outstanding poem/
more than well felt/
preach on gifted 1........
muchluv&respect

varentao 07-30-02 03:40 PM

very good piece monkey...deep...well put...it takes talent to execute such a style in a good way...but you did it....

... - searching deep within yourself for answers and ultimately..the truth...but everytime you come close...something seems to block it...but gradually you find new ways...and you begin to come to realisation of what it is you must do...you find some of the answers you seek...but you do not like it and the 'truth' hurts....but this opening of emotions within...has made you realise, roughly your path of fate... - or something along those lines..

.it had one or two levels to it....but one stuck out....a very deep piece monkey..actually one of my faves from you...people need to read this piece...as it is just so good...vivid imagery too...and some great metaphors and analogies used as well....


...respect.....

monkeypoet 08-05-02 09:16 AM

blackmoon: thanks for the reply... im glad u love my peices so much... cuz i respect you has a poet... thanks... love to ya

varentao: thanks for the reply... i thought i did alright with this peice... but what i can see that u saw what i was sayin... its tru that whenever u get close to figuring urself or sumthing out, something is there to block that final thought... but thanks again and love to ya


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