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.::False Idols::. Couple of things constrained me to do this…First was Muslims...I just don’t understand…haha…oh and no hate to any believers…this isn’t about one religion in particular but a variety...oh and I’m Christian too...please read the whole thing. I take rap seriously…check It’s a mystery why humans wish to believe there’s a higher life form, An entity who provides corn, then Floods his brood with a 40 day Storm, Asks the fathers of families for their first born, like a Pharaoh did Ramses, Somehow manage to divide the Red Seas, Only to Bring about Enemies, Onto equally the religion and church, along with all their believers, The rumor conceivers, for 70 virgins that’ll bring about many deceivers, Whether optimists or pessimists, we follow some sort of holy writtens, Books that could have very well been written, by any sort of Charles dickens, To the trained mind, one could question if religion is a paradox in itself, Such as an unforgivable sin being forgiven, and put away on some shelf, People rewarded 70 virgins at the end of their journey, for their dedication, But their wont be any perspiration, since they have no body for sensation, Its just a dramatization, to entrap more victims in a web of hypocrisy, How…with all the conspiracy, about how God told us to create a democracy, Instead of a hierarchy, run by a family, but we run low on the money meter, So believers pay the church, after being nudged by an Inspirational speaker, Yet they still come every week, even if it takes their money and time, Why cant we believe in the Greek Beliefs, sacrifices didn’t cost a dime, Seems so-called higher beings are just laughing in our faces or don’t exist, And we bring onto ourselves for being human, but we can’t see past the mist… |
uppin for some feedback fam...
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Aight man...
This is somthin diffrent once again... So it need a diffrent type of feed, but on the rhyming side of things, the flow lacked in some lines, but in others it was decnt as hell, the vocabulary was there, an you tried sending a message, an i think you should have achieved that, i'm not a strong believer in religion, but the things your rhyming about, are very strong points for a debate, an i'm sure once people who know more about this religon stuff read this peice, there will be much too talk about But on the whole, it was a decent drop, meaningful, the message you tried sending out i think will get thru too alot of people, an it was enjoyable too read Dope shit, stay up dogg Good lookin out Peace |
lol finally the first feedback post..hahaha..but yeh i would think it would get thru to alot of people...IF PEOPLE SAW IT....haha only one post in about 4-5 hours...lol anyways...lets get workin on that collab..
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This was a nice concept, but in my opinion, It didnt really flow that well. It's like you tried too hard to rhyme.
It's still good content though, except for the fact you say 70 virgins twice :huh: |
its good homie...im feelin it...nothin else to say...stay up
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well, yeh, flow was sketch at points....but i liked the content, makes you think eh, theres alot of iffyness on the whole religion deal lately, an your verse sums it up kinda nicely, your a good writer man
"To the trained mind, one could question if religion is a paradox in itself, Such as an unforgivable sin being forgiven, and put away on some shelf," -fav line right there, just flow and structure id say to work |
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