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you already recieved a loss when you spoke mah NAME
ill have ya style chopped up more than coke or CRANK
our crew consist of a murderous LIST
Mah tatics cut your throat an see how you SPIT
Ill rip ya keystyles just to have you AFFECTED
mah lyrics contain content hot like fired WEAPONS
while i advance with people buyin mah SHIT
you stay a textee labled a broke ass BITCH
take advantage of your style cauz its PLAYED
blow slugs with intentions of meltin your BRAIN
keep portions of heat to collide with EMCEES
tha games inside of me so take your DEFEAT
shatta dreams with accurate BEAMS
ill rip any kid from CONS .INC
a page of punches an dissin yall SNAKES
undastand whos tha mack an who got PLAYED

that was all right but theres a lot of room for improvement.....try to use a more complex rhyme scheme and that will make it sound a lot better.....other than that i think that you pretty strait....give some feedback on some of mah shit

there is really room for uppin but it was a dope start you got the flow down and a couple of cool multi's just try and expand and use more volcab

no dout dawg thanx for tha feed brah
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