Getting caught for driving under the influence
 

this is the first single off of my(don't laugh now) text album that's right i ain't ever seen it done i thought it was a dope idea so i did it if you wanna see it click here www.geocities.com/raven420_ca/cover.htm
anyway tell me what you think of this and the album too.

//caught for driving under the influence//

The rains bouncing off the road making it hard to control/
I turn too long at the corner now off the cliff I roll/
Around me puddles of rain or is it blood the pain’s unbearable/
I can’t move the idea of not moving has got me crying this is terrible/
I shouldn’t be drunk on top of that be racing it’s so rainy my phone still works strangely/
Phone 911 try to save my self my dad just died so I’m doing it for my family mainly/
They tell me to stay calm that helps on the way and what’s wrong?/
I’m surrounded by my own blood and it feels like my legs are gone!/
Off the phone now waiting for my rescue to arrive/
My vision’s blurry thinking when they get here they may have to revive/
If I die I hope my family can get through/
So close to my father’s death I wish I could go back cause this I wanna re do/
I hear the sirens approaching but I can’t see them/
There close to me now I just wish that I could hear them/
Now I’m looking over my body see the paramedic say it’s to late, cause of death the alcohol/
I guess the moral to this story is don’t drink and drive if you don’t want your life to hit last call/

uppin this don't sleep on it man

fucking haters

nice peaces i really like holla @ both my rhymes up in open mic now thanx

uppin this

it was pretty alright! didnt like the topic much and some parts were off the flow but overall it was a nice piece!

pls Vote on my battle wiff t-sypha its getting slept on since a day :sad:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=17907

peace

it was straight i guesse, but i think you need to give up tha text album idea, cuz that sh*t aint flyin...good verse though

it was good but it would have been better if you made it longer so you could explain the story and made it more detailed...........for what you had it was pretty tight though...\

holla at mah shit CRAZY HOE youll see what i mean kind of.......

peace out

uppin again and if this text album thing isn't working tell me why?