Kills Brain Cells
 

Course:
it just kills the brain cells/
when you hear the church bells/
there's one thought that you really do dread/
think'n thoughts in your mind, maybe she's dead/

Try to keep ya head up, be brave and don't take a bad dive/
everyone's got something, that just gives you the vive/
to try to keep ya life alive/
do any thing to help them arive alive, or stay and survive/
cause it gives the werst pain when one you love dies/
it just comes so quickly, no alurt it's suprise/
it's like in a war, all enemys no allies/
shit's so unfair, no chance for goodbyes/
try be'n in the werst weather with no supplies/
everything in the world you just start to demise/
it's like drive'n in the rain, car gets smashed and crash/
no one really cares, they think it's just black ash/
sometimes it's hard, gotta be good and pull through/
but sometimes there nothing to fight for, nothing to do/
now your dreams are smashed, nothing to pursue/
love is all gone, nothing there to review/

Course:
it just kills the brain cells/
when you hear the church bells/
there's one thought that you really do dread/
think'n thoughts in your mind, maybe she's dead/

I'll hook ya up with audio when i get done....

rhyming is kinda simple but overall it's not a bad verse solid flow just up the volcab

aight thx... UPPIN for more feedback

UPPIN

UPPIN FO FEEDBACK

nice verse........it told a good story and thats somethin that i always look for in good hip hop.........up yo vocab a little but otherwise it was a straight drop.........
holla at mines........

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aight, i got the shit in audio, i just gotta work on the intro and i'll post it here.... aight
Peace

i'll pep ya shit