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feed please How much pain can you take from within? from the devlish, power of sins you know you can't take it no more your heart is havocly sore Wishing you can break free but there's no escape to thyee all you can do is struggle with the problems you pray to god, wishing he'll solve them prayed, 2 years but still no fucking answer wish you can go to god personally, but you aint a prancer wish your voice can be reach to him, but you aint a oprah singer wish you can touch god, but you dont have long arms either but as long you still living, all you have to do is believe then god will send his answer, mission completed |
this was a good piece on da real u put it down i like da emotion, structure & da evathang else in this piece dat really reached out 2 God 4 sum assistance overall i'll say 9.5/10 keep it up
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pretty good, i liked your opening words in this poem, and the whole concept of it, but i didnt like how you tried to rhyme your words overtly, maybe you can try rhyming every other line, or you know poems dont have to rhyme either, but overall good piece, keep dropping.1
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O thanx for the feed-back.............................
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Flow was good. I like your structue. Your vocab was good. Wasn't too complexed. Nice drop and keep that shit coming if you ain't gonna leave.
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Thanks For The Feedback............naw I'm Back......lol.........bout To Drop Another Shit......i'll Leave A Feedback On Your Shit One Minute..........pz.
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