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Germ 03-02-05 11:34 PM

Obsession....
 
word, wrote it up....in.....17 minutes, haha, leave some feed


every minute, every hour, every day gets devoted
up all through the night, surprized my brain hasnt exploded
i work hard during the week, but my money is drained
all for this one cause, in the end nothings gained
i dont know why i just cant let go, move on
but days feel like seconds you dont know how far you've gone
its like your own little world, where everythings alright
until reality hits, and its harder than a snake bite
but i'll continue to do it, because it feels so good
i wouldn't wanna be helped, even if i could
you may call it an addiction, but i call it a game
it keeps me occupied...so tell me wheres the shame?
you dont know how it is, you didnt live how i did
hated by kids....so i kept to myself, in my room where i hid
because all through my life, i've been nothing but teased
just because i was different, didnt mean i had a disease
but dont even try, you'll never understand
its my life now, its not like this was planned
i make my own choices, dont try to persuade me
your either with me now, or leave and betray me
doesnt matter, i have all i need right here
no more tears, in solitude i have nothing to fear
so i continue to waste away, with one sole intent
not realizing i've already begun to descent
i gotta get away, im going crazy, just wanna shout
but i get control, steady my hand, and click 'log out'

Germ 03-02-05 11:52 PM

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2035740

........upppppppppppppping........................

Kamikazee 03-03-05 06:19 AM

yo dis shit was a hot drop.....i was feelin da flow actually i was feelin ur hole verse.....nice shit mayne......Pz

ReVeReNcE 03-03-05 07:33 AM

This was nice

Flow=Smooth
Structure=Good
Vocab=Good
Mulits=???
Imagery=Good
Topic=Stuck Well

7/10 - Nice werk

Adam 03-03-05 08:54 AM

This was so fucking wack, you're fucking wack. Fuck this Open Mic was shit...

^ You know how it is...Good drop bro...8/10

Germ 03-03-05 02:23 PM

^ word....i will kill you in your sleep :thumbup:

uppin fo some mo

TheFlowIsSick 03-03-05 02:51 PM

dope drop, the flow was good, imagery was decent, best thing about it was the consistency, staayed steady the whole way through, and not many people can do that anymore, they just flow off topic but you kept it on track dope piece

8.5/10

Germ 03-03-05 03:49 PM

thanks fo feed.....uppin

Adrenaline 03-03-05 04:31 PM

to 7.5/10 to start off saying..I liked it...I had a favourite line in there somewhere about "all to myself in the room where I hid" or something like that...yo It was good
vocab-decent
structure-pretty good
imagery-wass aiight
tone-was good

all that stuff...u know...just make sure u return the favour yo...uppin

genocide sickness:(part one) the beginning

^^thanks....

Germ 03-03-05 05:04 PM

.wird, i will tonight................up

Germ 03-03-05 09:55 PM

uuupin..............

Germ 03-04-05 12:15 AM

..............upppppin............................

~Sundance Kid~ 03-04-05 07:54 AM

Intresting topic.
Structure was on point.
Good vocab.
It had a nice flow from start to finish....nice peice :thumbup:

Germ 03-04-05 02:04 PM

yup...........up

Sik Wit It 03-04-05 02:52 PM

pretty good shit here, flow was aight, structure was a lil blah,
and the topic was aight here, but overall good piece though


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