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Obsession....
word, wrote it up....in.....17 minutes, haha, leave some feed
every minute, every hour, every day gets devoted up all through the night, surprized my brain hasnt exploded i work hard during the week, but my money is drained all for this one cause, in the end nothings gained i dont know why i just cant let go, move on but days feel like seconds you dont know how far you've gone its like your own little world, where everythings alright until reality hits, and its harder than a snake bite but i'll continue to do it, because it feels so good i wouldn't wanna be helped, even if i could you may call it an addiction, but i call it a game it keeps me occupied...so tell me wheres the shame? you dont know how it is, you didnt live how i did hated by kids....so i kept to myself, in my room where i hid because all through my life, i've been nothing but teased just because i was different, didnt mean i had a disease but dont even try, you'll never understand its my life now, its not like this was planned i make my own choices, dont try to persuade me your either with me now, or leave and betray me doesnt matter, i have all i need right here no more tears, in solitude i have nothing to fear so i continue to waste away, with one sole intent not realizing i've already begun to descent i gotta get away, im going crazy, just wanna shout but i get control, steady my hand, and click 'log out' |
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2035740
........upppppppppppppping........................ |
yo dis shit was a hot drop.....i was feelin da flow actually i was feelin ur hole verse.....nice shit mayne......Pz
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This was nice
Flow=Smooth Structure=Good Vocab=Good Mulits=??? Imagery=Good Topic=Stuck Well 7/10 - Nice werk |
This was so fucking wack, you're fucking wack. Fuck this Open Mic was shit...
^ You know how it is...Good drop bro...8/10 |
^ word....i will kill you in your sleep :thumbup:
uppin fo some mo |
dope drop, the flow was good, imagery was decent, best thing about it was the consistency, staayed steady the whole way through, and not many people can do that anymore, they just flow off topic but you kept it on track dope piece
8.5/10 |
thanks fo feed.....uppin
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to 7.5/10 to start off saying..I liked it...I had a favourite line in there somewhere about "all to myself in the room where I hid" or something like that...yo It was good
vocab-decent structure-pretty good imagery-wass aiight tone-was good all that stuff...u know...just make sure u return the favour yo...uppin genocide sickness:(part one) the beginning ^^thanks.... |
.wird, i will tonight................up
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uuupin..............
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..............upppppin............................
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Intresting topic.
Structure was on point. Good vocab. It had a nice flow from start to finish....nice peice :thumbup: |
yup...........up
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pretty good shit here, flow was aight, structure was a lil blah,
and the topic was aight here, but overall good piece though |
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