Genocide Sickness:(part one) the beginning
 

16 barz of pain...

*enters beat...scratching*

[MALE VOICE TALKS]
Genocide..G-Genocide..is the murder..is the murder of..of a whole..of a whole race..a whole race.....*fades beat*

[ACAPELLA]

benefit- "My wrath will wreak havoc on your family,gradually everyone will die through a homicidal tragedy"...*fades*...tragedy...tragedy...tragedy...

*enters beat*

yaa it's ya boy..................u aint ready for this...

(...houston we have a problem)
1,2 mic chek,killin beats my skills is in-depth
im set,on point like a needle,so im ready to inject
deflect and rebound ur flow's off me,ur all rejects
u need to reset ur life like reincarnation or just meet death
and restep ur every move like playin detective
cuz im deff kid,my words will abuse ur brain,it's invective
and the tef biz,that's done wit,im already surpassed wreckless
floodin emcees brains so hectic,u'd think I was a tempest
im not breakfast,but I start ur day off right so im the next-best
me get rest from rhymin is not fit,like u bein a text vet
so you best get on ur way quick before I dismantle you
fuck "strangle" dude,I'll disintegrate ya lifeform 'til DNA cant sample you
I got hammers too,but I dont mean da ones dat can slam a screw
it's the Establishment in my hand wit enough power to damage crews
the fact is true,I keep rippin niggaz brains open like gogurt tubes
and folgers too,im so black,I convinced Jay-Z to turn his album blue
u cant manage my shoes,im too big for your mouth like manwich food
crammed in two peices of bread,I always pay my dues
I blaze up dudes who claim their hot cuz that's a lamens rule
and by slayin dudes, I take pride in killin usin satan's tools
the verdict is heavy,glocks,bats,stones or an olden mechetti
u got fire in ur veins,I'll slice u up hot like golden spaghetti
y'all aint ready to see the face of death cuz dat shit is ugly
but if ur lucky u might just tame Adrenaline like ur killin chucky
to me it's lovely,slaughterin monsters and vampires like bein buffy
many demons and villains battled me but none has even touched me
ur feat is crummy,cuz at the last second y'all screamin duppy
when u see my black hand smack across ya face like cheatin mummy
and the heathens love me,I be chillin in a church waitin to steal some money
y'all deal is funny,cuz when I spit rhymes u back down quick like meals in tummy
and for readin dummies,I'll kill u next time like the revenge of Jason
This' Adrenaline wit da sickness,the GENOCIDE INVASION(invasion)

[CHORUS]...*scratchin*

g-genocide Genocide..it's da s-sickness(da sickness)
genocide Genocide..it's-it's da realness(da realness)
nigga what?(nigga what?)..I know u feel dis(u feel dis)
I slay ur rhymes(slay ur rhymes) it's-it's da illness(da illness)
g-Genocide(genocide)..prepare to die(prepare to die)
(repeat 2X)

fuck dis man...*walks out da booth*

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not bad, dont think its the best by you, mainly because the second half of your verse you toned it down a bit....didnt use as good of vocab and wordplay as you did in the first half and it lost alot of your imagery....and you started using simple metaphors that i just wasnt feeling, like buffy and all that....but it wasnt bad, just thought you coulda made it better in the second half,,,,keep up thou

ya thanks man...personally I thought it was good all the way through,but that's what were all here for...to see what to improve on....anyway it's good to see some critiquing going on...

uppin once again...