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Just A Memory
As I Realize And Cry On How A Perfect Thing Left Mih Eyes
Think Of All The Laughter We Shared And How We'd Talked Until The Sun A Rised Now She's Gone,I Still Smell Her Aroma With Such A Delightful Scent Its On Mih Mind How Did I Let The Girl Of Mih Dreams Get Out Of Mih Sight And Not Give Her Final Goodbye Only Photos Can Show The Good Times We Had While We Were Together And I Really Really Mean It 4rm The Body Of Mih Heart When Say I'll Do Anything To Get Her I Couldn't Think Of Shit Else Mih 1st Poem Lol Shit Wass Funny................... |
Yo This Was Pretty Decent Man Nice Vocabulary Fiz Up Ya Structure Though Weerd
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Definitly fix the structure... your lines are a little stretched.
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it was good & a very nice drop duke u got the hang of it all u need 2 do is work on ur structure & it'll b on point fo sho overall i'll give it 8.5/10 keep it up & u'll get ur elevation as time goes on...& make sure 2 return the favor in my poem: Wanna Change My Life?? ya dig
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