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Miss. Lyricist 03-07-05 06:22 PM

My Baby's Daddy
 
I dreamed black dreams the night we kissed
The memory of your lips lingers cold and crisp
Dawdling flames that curdle my soul
Banishing me to hell as we lost control
Yet nothing could melt the ice you incased me with

Twilight was captured within your eyes
They led me nigh to where nightmares lie
You kissed my lids and I was blind
Darkness I feared (or was it the light?)
Vaguely, I heard myself scream a thousand times

You demolished my weakness with your touch
My heart grew hard with the blackest love
And then forgetting what it meant to care,
I dropped my morals and left them there
We devoured the stars, until darkness had overcome

Featured poem for a week,great job~fluid

A_M_H 03-07-05 06:53 PM

this is a nice drop ma u put a good lil twist on the whole concept of ur baby's daddy & had me ova here like damn i wonder who ur baby daddy is cuz dat'z 1 lucky nigga but neway nice vocab, structure was on point, & i like da metas overall i'll give this a 9.5/10 fo sho keep up the good work & r u spanish just wanted 2 know

Miss. Lyricist 03-07-05 07:42 PM

No I'm not hispanic.

A_M_H 03-10-05 12:14 AM

well miss lyricist can u return the favor 2 me in my new poem "Wanna Change My Life??"

Linguistics 03-10-05 03:37 AM

yo this is realy dope.....it was good......i hope my girl feals that passionate about me.......


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