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Determined 03-11-05 05:35 PM

My Notebook
 
Check out my latest drop and hit me with feedback, peace

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/determindmusic.htm

i have responded to all sorts of shit, so I wont post them, I am about to go respond to some right now, peace

Know-Gimix 03-11-05 07:26 PM

this wasn't too bad, your close, but I wasn't really feeling the delivery, u didn't put much energy into it, lyrics were pretty decent u had a nice rhyme scheme through most of it, just sounds like your uncomfortable on the mic, the volume goes up alot from the first verse to the second, it sounds like your delivery improves a little bit too, just think it would have been better if the energy was there the whole time... keep droppin and postin all that feedback..1

Determined 03-12-05 01:15 AM

thanks for the reply and I agree about that, I think I need to re spit it, thanks for the feed though post your sight and I will hit it up peace and hip hop

Tha Q 03-12-05 04:44 AM

i didn't even realize u were flowin when u did come in...need a better lead in...Oh...dat was the hook?...man, u need better clarity and definition wit the transitions from intro to hook to verse...w/e


ur flow is oka..kinda basic and 80s...

need more internal rappin to make it dope

and ur voice is okay

multies were coo


and I liked the pedo line


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wez_nilez 03-12-05 01:01 PM

aiight not really feeling the beat...vocals are mixed far too in the first part then the second part is slightly too loud....was the notebook part the hook? I couldnt tell blended in too much...the editing on the vocal is mad sloppy...lyrics shows potential...some really great punch lines though ...but the editing and the over all mixing really needs alot of work...

Determined 03-12-05 02:04 PM

thanks 4 the feed, i will drop it again in the lab and work on mix, peace

Determined 03-13-05 08:45 PM

uppin, come on with the feedback, I have been droppin feeds everyday

JRoy 03-14-05 12:25 AM

ok i'm peepin......the beats ok....the flow is decent.....ya coulda had more presense.......you were on beat....overall this is a decent track.....6.5/10

Determined 03-14-05 12:36 AM

thanks for droppin a response, I take in almost everything that is said and try and elobarote on it in the next song, the hook on my next drop should b real good, good lookin everybody

L.E 03-14-05 12:36 PM

Listening...

A'ight, beat, nothing much to it, pretty basic...I agree wit Tha Q...need a better lead in and a better hook...flow is decent, this is a decent track overall, delivery is pretty good, kinda ends abrubtly, effects is straight, quality is good. Keep it up.

Determined 03-14-05 03:20 PM

thanks for the reply everything is noted, determined


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