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don't care about nothing
now why in the world would I give a damn about you this is my point of view so what the hell you gonna do shut the fuck up screaming in my ear causing my frustration im'a move somewhere else some where i can hav a vacation ive been humilated hated with everyones sick thought penertrated I don't know where the im going my life has just become faded sick of the sight of you everytime i see ya im so anxious somebody throw me off the atlas cause i just can't hack this im following a new day always thinking to hard and analizing got obsesions about my future and thinkin about my timing it's like a mountain im climbing everything has been do bad so why is nothing changing the story is so really sad but it's okay sort of im slowly getting myself together trying to avoid the weather trying to remain better my words are clever and I really hate life's joy im becoming annoyed and im'a have you destroyed im suicidal with a 6 inch knife next to my desk would anyone care if i stabbed it through my chest i can't describe how bad that I feel everyday i wake up pretending this is another dream o yay wouldn't we have more fun and less pressure in dreams my brain is so fucked up it constantly flips and screams I have no qualifications just desvestation at the moment my soul is broken and im ashamed you can see it open im sick of my partime job working in a damn pub with two fat bitches eating shit out of my sink tub then I remember the days I was hating school people took me for a fool cause i wasn't cool o well you can go to hell i'll say my fair wells phillip manning used to make storys of me and tell uhh sorry phillip woman shall I re phrase he wouldn't go away i was sick of his ugly face till one day I striked back at the bitch ass gay I strangled him till his whole face turned gray then started stomping an arabian with tooth decay and told his little pussy friends to stay the fuck away you hated me and now im hating you your pathetic you don't know wat ive been through so have a shit life because i'll be enjoying mine sippin the finest wine and im'a just get By! dopeness the end... |
suicede shit my kinda shit im feelin this good structre nice rhymes 7/10
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shit was tyte son, I couldn't of made a better 1, I like your structure and your rymes I feeling you keep dat shit up
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son 9 1/2 /10 :shoot:
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upping for more feedback
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Yea cuzz dis was an iight drop here i liked da hole thing flow was good structure was good..........good drop homie.......Pz 7.5/10 RTF link in sig
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pretty good flow was pretty good and the stucutre was weak but the imagery was nice it was an alright peice could of been better but your coming along, keep doin your thang
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yea shit was alright, but you still comin up so ima be expectin great things from u. flow was nice and everything. had a lot of imagery in there, reminds me of how i used to be. all u need to do is work on the compleity of ya flow, cause ya lines was hot but they was a lil basic.
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how were they basic ive got this talent to pull of emotion like that it all comes natural to me and that makes me alot differen't to other people im not sayin im the best or anything but ive got mad creative skills for songs. If you told me what i need to work on or maby gave me a lesson that would help..
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thanks least I know im makin progress soon no ones gonna touch me lyrically ive been through alot of shit in my life and i can let all of my emotion out.
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