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Evolution vs J-Will
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Evolution has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-12-05 08:37 PM.
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J-Will has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-12-05 08:39 PM.
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yo I don't know why you call yourself "evolution" u aint the process of change by degress you seem more like a problem and im the "solution". Dog i ain't never sollutin to anyone but one thing i can tell you im always poluting like oil spills, I got words that will damage ur mind and have seeing things like you was on excasty pills. Dissin you, to battle me you bit off more then you can chew,The way I'll leave you more puzzled then arubics cube. Im sorry man you ain't no kind "of competition" and next time before you wanna battle me you better ask "permission"
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J-Will said that he was back...kid, saying that was a waste of time Your whole rhyme shit that you say...is just a waste of time He’s been here since September, and he went up and left Came back, but if I jumped off a bridge, he’d follow my steps This kid needs a crew, but I forgot that his bitchass stands alone I should just beat this J-Will punk, and yet leave his ass unknown Kid thinks he’s a pimpin, but yet I told you that you’re no ponce* Just looking at your battles, I can tell that RV gives you a wack response He put 6 – UNLIMITED LINES, & now he’s probably gonna post late It’s a damn shame that he been here since 9-23-04 and still a flyweight Jmoneyty1 isn’t good, but don’t worry kid, this isn’t really a diss Cause your punches are like Michael Jordan at the plate... .................................................. ..............................your likely to miss* Key’d *Ponce meaing pimp in French *Michael Jordan played baseball & wasn’t that good @ it tho… |
J-Will said that he was back...kid, saying that was a waste of time Your whole rhyme shit that you say...is just a waste of time He’s been here since September, and he went up and left Came back, but if I jumped off a bridge, he’d follow my steps This kid needs a crew, but I forgot that his bitchass stands alone I should just beat this J-Will punk, and yet leave his ass unknown Kid thinks he’s a pimpin, but yet I told you that you’re no ponce* Just looking at your battles, I can tell that RV gives you a wack response He put 6 – UNLIMITED LINES, & now he’s probably gonna post late It’s a damn shame that he been here since 9-23-04 and still a flyweight Jmoneyty1 isn’t good, but don’t worry kid, this isn’t really a diss Cause your punches are like Michael Jordan at the plate... .................................................. ..............................your likely to miss* Key’d *Ponce meaing pimp in French *Michael Jordan played baseball & wasn’t that good @ it tho…* Jmoneyty1 = his aim |
J-Will said that he was back...kid, saying that was a waste of time Your whole rhyme shit that you say...is just a waste of time He’s been here since September, and he went up and left Came back, but if I jumped off a bridge, he’d follow my steps This kid needs a crew, but I forgot that his bitchass stands alone I should just beat this J-Will punk, and yet leave his ass unknown Kid thinks he’s a pimpin, but yet I told you that you’re no ponce* Just looking at your battles, I can tell that RV gives you a wack response He put 6 – UNLIMITED LINES, & now he’s probably gonna post late It’s a damn shame that he been here since 9-23-04 and still a flyweight Jmoneyty1 isn’t good, but don’t worry kid, this isn’t really a diss* Cause your punches are like Michael Jordan at the plate... .................................................. ..............................your likely to miss* Key’d *Ponce meaing pimp in French *Michael Jordan played baseball & wasn’t that good @ it tho…* Jmoneyty1 = his aim |
Voted For: J-Will
alright, heres how i saw this one: structure/flow: tie... wills was all over the place and kinda hard to follow... evol had stretched lines and an overly simplistic rhyme scheme punches: will gets this with more wordplay and harder punches... evol's punches were weak and madd played overall, i thought both of you guys have major room for improvement, but will gets my vote, no hate homeys return the favor please links in sig |
Voted For: Evolution
aight this is easy....heres how it see it jwill.....elevate is the key word here....gotta work on everything man, from punches to structure, whole works, but everything wasnt bad, vocab was nice.....you seem to be on the right track with battling, but you need some more elevatin, read the tutorials or sump...like, make your verse structured to benefit the voters, dont want to make a paragraph looking thing thats hard to read, cause it will take away from your punches and personals....word, so, keep elevatin, not bad for starting off, but you need some work evolution....giving you this because you had good structure/flow and your punches were aight....not bad, some were played, some were stupid, like your opener, you rhymed the exact same thing, no, bad line, haha, sorry, no hate, but not really a punch if your using the same words.....but you had some nice lines in there, vocab and wordplay were decent, your on the right track too, keep elevating and you'll be fine......oh, and you seemed like you had a few stretched lines, butthat will come in time, keep up man v/evolution.....and word, dont be cheap, RTF in one of the links in my sig, either OSB or chowie chow, its appreciated...word |
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Voted For: J-Will
ok im goin to make this simple first with evolution you took to long elevate i didnt like how you started, you repeated the same thing over again J-Will said that he was back...kid, saying that was a waste of time Your whole rhyme shit that you say...is just a waste of time wow thats a bad way to start but you had ok personal and sort of good punches plus you strech ur words no dissrepect just stateing the facts. Jwill your structer was off well both of your structers was not good but J will was sort of better you had good vocab and iight punches. just work on ur structer i have to say i have to go with J-will |
Voted For: Evolution
evolution: had average punchz but used personals throughout and had a decent structure. j-will: tha structure let you down a lot, although once i got used to it you had a reasonable flow. again, punchz were average. overall, i'm goin for evolution cos of a combination of tha better structure and personals...but this shit was still close. now vote on... http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=180996 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=181485 |
Voted For: Evolution
Wow, this was a pretty weak battle Evolution, u won solely on the basis that j-will's structure was so fucked that I got tired of reading it...both of your punches were weak...no multi's by either one of you, but Evolution, gotta give this one to u, because of your structure...and cuz J-will's shit wasn't makin any sense to me NO HATE |
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