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PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ vs heat
Battle Rules: 10- Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic- "blood in my eyes" G-luck :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 03-14-05 at 06:32 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
befor i check-in is it ok if i go 16 to 18?>??
10 aint enough to me i thought it was but is it good if i drop like 16 to 18? |
^^ No.......................10 lines................
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heat has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 06:24 PM.
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PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 06:24 PM.
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TOPIC. blood in my eyes:
with blood in my eyes im still a... hustle at vision speed.. to deal with my deficiency Time is money so I operate efficiently my vision starting blurr, N still moving for-ward getting blind like stevey, yet still on the block with more-work Decisions need.. to be made without hesitation I got names, numbers and kids with stomach-aching there blood in my eyes yet no gang-wars outside cant let my family starve, i rather let them feed of my pride the stakes are high like being an 8 ft baller - da[/b] heat[b] u'll never-miss with a better twist..im a sure shot with my clever wrist aint coppin the steel…im not a thief, thug or the jakes and it’ll take you 5 minutes before that all correlates..... GET IT?? im not a thief. aint gang-bang'in, nor the jakes *cops* . . . . im refering to my RAPS... BLOOD IN MY EYES good luck |
I was angry at this women, for thou she betrayed my heart Even though it was an 16 years of being married, she didn’t took my love Saw here on the bed, moving up and down, o it torn me apart My caring feelings turned to hatred, I went overboard putting this women soul to above . . The more she screamed, the more I got mad, she was hopeless trapped in my dark shell After I got done with her, I took a good look at the man, O thou I went into rage it was my son I lynched over to the other-side of the bed, in my drawer, pulled out the “end of this hell” My son, o no, He’s no son to me, for thou I didn’t lead him to be a devils prophet. Die you bum . .POP, POP……BODY DROPS . Sitting in the bloody scene I hear the cops coming, and while that, my tears are leaking I see too many red colors splattered across the room, Tsk Tsk Tsk, should’ve never cheat |
Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
nice drops to both.. poetic.. i see you use a differ style and thats good.. cuz its different from others and actually explains alot better and shows good imagery.. nice job.. the only thing u should work on is your vocah..thats about it.. heat.. your verse lacked imagery.. your vocab was on point but couldn't imagine wut u wrote. but nice metaphor refering to your rap... also.. work on ur flow man..its like the lines are strecthed.. vote.. poetic |
u shorten ya front to strech ya lines * not a bad idea*
but anyways good luck |
and Dabatos learn what u speak befor u talk cuz my lines aint strech
if i would of shorten my front i could of strech lines like poetic 2 but its cool cuz u aint notices hes strech lines but say i had them?? its cool, cuz if i would of went like 16 to 18 it would of been a way better read fuck is 10 lines doing for me? and i hope u aint bite since he said u change ya style mmm? tisk tisk tisk kids these days cant come up with they own shit. |
wow! at calling me a biter......stop bitching and go with the flow......it's the internet mane stop being a nerd.
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And this IS an alias.......lmao.....................
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gooooood,
con-grats on having an alias. now for the fatc: u will not and cant drop another verse like that again in no 60 min. u cant say u aint bite if others on this site said u change ya style. *hint* and u probley vote for ya-self if u have alias u probely havent been cought yet. this site is mad lame so far. |
This was feedback posted for heat
I see you liking my alias herb!
LMAO@ CALLING ME A BITER AND PLUS.......THINKING I VOTED FOR MYSEFL......WOW OK......ANYTHING ELSE? |
If ya check my battle with bablon (link in sig) I been using that style mane, just changed it a little.......
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