Against Me
 

Credit for anything I do not recieve.
Anything I achieve you deny with disbelief.
Never good enough, never satisfied.
Always so tough, I'm unidentified.

No place to belong, you reject me constantly.
No face all along, you forget me willingly.

Cry I cannot, too many tears shed on you.
Sighs I've got for too many things you won't do.
Understand? Never it's got to be your way or no other.
Banned forever. Ever let me stay me? Please consider.

I carry a world on my shoulders.
The world I want to show ya.
Look past me now, everything's getthing older.
Blink through me and you will never see,
How I truly feel - with you against me.

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I really loved reading this poem, it had like these different levels in it that make you stand still here and there.

The emotion was very strong, had a a somewhat sad and yet so powerful, strong vibe over it. Bit agressive at times even, like keeping your head up high when everyone else would keep it down (don't know if this made sense but you know what I mean lol)

The vocab was very good, you had a nice balance between basic and complex, it was suited for the content of your piece.

I like your writing style a lot, at first sight it might seem a bit simple but in reality, there are more levels and more content in your poem.

Keep it up girl!

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nice one fo real..........but i would like to see a lil more deepness with this one.......something i learned is that the deeper you go the better it gets for the reader......oh and try to use some metas........they alwase get madd props!........good peace 7/10........Peayces