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Heroic vs Heat
Battle Rules:
10- 12 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 03-20-05 at 02:44 AM Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in. |
Heroic has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-20-05 02:21 AM.
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"Exhaust" Pipes Burn, But Still Aint "Heating"~His~Flow Notice I Got This Kid Weak Like Deers Bleeding~In~Snow You Couldn't Spit Heat, If You Drank A Cup Of Tea Disposed Like Batteries, Demolishing Him In The Sea Kid Ya Not Beating Me, Disney's Got Smaller Imaginations Only Chance Of Him Getting A Girl Is His Net Communications "ByPass", Like Jhon Q This Kid'll Need A New Heart Dismantling His Arms, And Tearing His Tounge Apart No Punches, The Kid Spitting Nothing But Blood Half Him Folded Up, Like A Door Matt Or A Rug Providing His Own Humiliation, This Session Is Done Complete Discrimination I Hope You Learned A Lesson Son |
heat has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-20-05 02:37 AM.
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Id throw insults at this dude quick, but screw it, thats just stupid
Cuz fact is, id call you a faggit, but ya name beat me to it (heroic ha) not smack dvd, but i'll use the dvd to smack u into a personal encounter aint great at elevatin, the way heroic only over the counter Unlike you I don’t duck son, instead im "bruising ya face" (damaging his rep/face) You try to drop heavy, but like liposuctions, ya “losin the weight” i title him a fag.. heroic wit a win is like Ike wit Tina's bag and i'm known to have low tolerance(fa lame)..so i'll brake heroic in half heroic is light-weight, wouldnt be a treat if he had a pistol and a verse of agression so i'll teach heroic not to mess with heat like a Drug Conferences my bars are cold like those of Alaskan Prisons,got him shaken till hes knees-hurts plus im schooling heroic on a basic level, like them Elementary Teachers good luck |
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This was feedback posted for Heroic
yo you was ok but you need to work more on punches, you also got to work alot on your personals i see you played off his name but you could have used different personals, that name shit got boring, but your strucutre was OK, you just need to work on using personals and metaphores and punches all in the same verse, and try harder to beat your chalenger so that you know that you win, but you also need to calm down on your self glorification, it was like everyother line would be slefglorification
Heat, your structure was real wack and your punches where not hitting, if you woudl have prewrittent his then you might have one, just eleavte in every area, sorry but thats all i can say |
i couldnt vote becuase of my post count, but you one this, sorry tho, uppin for some votes i gues
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Voted For: Heroic
uhh okay.... opener-heroic structure-heroic punchlines-heroic creativity-heroic multis-nun wordplay-heat a had a lil personals-nun from both finisher-heroic enjoyed-^^^....heat dont think im hatin on u fam im just votin on madd battles its nothin personal...i just think u lose in every catagorie and datz sad cuzz heroic shit wasn't all dat hott...fix ya structure and step up ya punchlines |
upp'inf or more votes and why the hell u made the post count 500 to vote??
i dont even have 500 hahahaha so u can get the vet to vote for u? fuckin lame upp'in |
Not Really Kid, Coz I Always Make My Battle 500 Post Count
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Upping This Bish Once More................................
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