Love Till Death
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hope ya'll like it Lonely, the word that describes how the world go underestimatin the power puttin you on hold. And you know that nothin stop the tears from runnin This a World of mystery, I say the fears are comin Nothin hurts more than when your life go off track You lose all of your friends and then you start to go mad But now the bad will keep comin if you continue to let it No one else makes your decisions cause Its in you to set it. Up to you whether you care or not to make a change. Will you live your life in hell or you bother to rearrange You gots one last chance to fix all your mistakes Choose to be the hero or the venomous snake Cause with the way things are goin, you might as well fall Surrender to the world or will you stand tall Im amazed at how complicated life can be I need to end this madness. I strife to complete! Holla to the world. Im fullfillin my quest Im stoppin to drop in and clog in my lonlyines My temper is bustin my trustin friends. Dont test! Sayin sry to mah doggz and girlz. I said, SAID! Holla to the world. Im fullfillin my quest Im stoppin to drop in and clog in my lonlyines My temper is bustin my trustin friends. Dont test! Sayin sry tah my doggz and girlz. Love till death With the world on my shoulders, it's hard to keep goin Phobia sickness keeps me upthrowin and knowin the fact that I treat my friends like dirt I apologize yall. Ima try to make this work! and i swear on behalf of all that I stand for Ima do everything I possibly can and more Look into my eyes. know the power in my words The neverending troubles. This is sour and obsured Its like Im cursed with ability to anger all my peers The worst fear of all. The cause of every tear. But as the years go by, Ive learned many things Never take for granted what your friends can bring Now I thank all of you for puttin up wit my fits Yall are true friends. Loose end. Remember this! Trust the words that I speak cause this is the truth I promise never to repeat my ticks on you Holla to the world. Im fullfillin my quest Im stoppin to drop in and clog in my lonlyines My temper is bustin my trustin friends. Dont test! Sayin sry to mah doggz and girlz. I said, SAID! Holla to the world. Im fullfillin my quest Im stoppin to drop in and clog in my lonlyines My temper is bustin my trustin friends. Dont test! Sayin sry to mah doggz and girlz. Love till death I start to regret things as I look in my past All my friends showed me love but I aint show none back Sayin sorry to yall deep with the soul of this rap Leave my heart open to start to follow this path I hope that one day I could make all of mah swears facts So I could swear to be there. Swear that I gotchur back! I know I havent been. This rap is dared to be packed wit so much emotion that its flowin overly jacked Im straight packed wit my wishes and dreams. This is wack Sometimes seems that Im mean. Matter of fact! Im Lovin all that let me know that u care. Hell Yea! When something's wrong, you know that Ima be there. Its only fair that All the swears and promises aint nothin if they aint kept Im promisin by wishing this lyrical concept By stickin wit, you've shown me how much u truly care No matter wat problems, I swear that Ima be there Holla to the world. Im fullfillin my quest Im stoppin to drop in and clog in my lonlyines My temper is bustin my trustin friends. Dont test! Sayin sry to mah doggz and girlz. I said, SAID! Holla to the world. Im fullfillin my quest Im stoppin to drop in and clog in my lonlyines My temper is bustin my trustin friends. Dont test! Sayin sry to mah doggz and girlz. Love till death |
nice OM here ma...good use of vocab...
pretty decent topic here on what you did ... ... the flow was good here too, & the chorus was good, i liked that..but overall you had a nice OM here though...7/10 |
thx boo...........
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uppin...........
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damn can i get some fuckin feed instead of yall just reading it
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wordizzle....this would make a good song probs....lyrics were good, vocab and wordplay decent....i think the 3rd verse was the best, for flow anyways, it was fast pace and really topped off your piece nicely....overall, not a bad drop...some lines seemed stretched, but that don't matter, you're a good writer and this wasnt a bad piece at all...enjoyed it....la la la....
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real nice piece, i think the simplicity worked because the emotion carried it off.....could have upped your vocab a lil more but everything else was on point 8/10....keep doing it
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thx grl uppin dis hope i can get more feed
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This Was A Decent Piece, Emotion Was Flawless, Vocabulary Was Nice, Structure Was Good Over All This Was A Dope Piece, Coz The Emotion In Here...9.5/10
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dat was hot. i like the flow and concept. 8/10 if you get a chance check out my open mic. it's on da first page.
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thx fo da feed.
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yo not my style but i loved it really feelin it and u came through with some emotion wat some people seem ta lack these days but u did ur thang and i loved it..u got some talent and it's hard ta think that this was ur first open mic...8/10
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lol not my first open mic my first song
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very nice, girlie.
deep emotions here. keep it up. id love to see this as an audio. i give this an 8/10 |
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