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K-------O 03-21-05 06:43 AM

first open mic
 
Riddle me this and riddle me that
K---O is here to get rid of the crap
Single handedly expanding my empire
I was handed this talent to never expire
Its lookin dire, for some starting to perspire
"oh shit KO really is here bringin the fire"

Well listen up with your ear in the air
Not your rear to the sky, love being behind
Well i lead from the front, wont ever hide
Dont need my feet, just stand and fight wiv speech
My lyrcial concepts ending all beef
Sweeping all geeks from under their feet

This is the internet never forget
never neglect to respect or get put in check
I come to collect souls like im Death
Like your next, white, black or red
Typing the text and selecting the best
Lyricsm in sado masacism, this isnt
Wat it is you'll see slippery shower floors in prison

Mentor 03-21-05 07:01 AM

it was aight actually pretty good for being ur first open mic but i'd give it a 4.5/10 u had good flow for the most part structure was really up there but if u have a more better topic u'd probably be better but u were a little simple with it some multis but not much make sure ta increase multis the more the better and next time try ta get more lines this open mic was kinda short otherwise u did pretty good for a beginner

Untraceable 03-21-05 10:11 AM

not bad for a first time om.....but the thing is you shoulda stated this was a freestyle cuz then youll get ppl like hood_dawg not realizing that is really what it was.....there wasnt an actual topic to it....thats what a freestyle is...lol.....good flow good vocab and decent structure could be a lil more even but keep it up and i hope ppl dont sleep on this cuz its your first....ppl need encouragement to keep doin them so feed will help :thumbup:

Mentor 03-21-05 10:33 AM

yeah like me i got all discouragement and hate but mine just sucked lol

Germ 03-21-05 02:19 PM

decent, need to elevate your vocab and wordplay quit a bit...strucuture, decent....flow, little choppy in some areas.....concept, basic...but it was your first open mic, thus im taking it easy, not bad, just keep working on shit

Single handedly expanding my empire
I was handed this talent to never expire

^ only lines i really liked....keep up


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