Tony Green vs Heat
 

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Check in by: 03-21-05 at 08:02 PM

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DQ'ed for swaying
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183082

Tony Green has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-21-05 07:32 PM.

This battle is bull shit I'm gone win by a large amount.
He says he brings Heat but Water Guns don't count.
Heat says in a couple months He'll be one of the best that ever lived.
Believeing that is like believing Michael Jackson didn't rape those little kids.
So I aint worried bout this kid or that his heat is going to attack us.
You can tell he's wack he mad a crew to recruit all of RV's wack rappers.
I Bite niggaz and stay with the heat call me a HammerHead shark.
And bitch you aint Heat you just a fucking fire spark.

heat has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-21-05 07:44 PM.

Damn you still pre-writing hurry up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I heard you run with cross dressers in Gucci outfits
So your click n drag has nothing to do with computer mouses

No way he’s getting play, with the face of this faggot
Only time he’s bagging chicks…he’s asking “paper or plastic”

i heard u was makin a album, and matter fact pretty soon its droppin..
so imma be burning ya cd.... but i dont mean makin copies

this niggas like a kindergardeners readin heiroglyphics, u just dont get the 'pic'
even if you was drinkin orange juice,u still couldnt
'concentrate' on a 'grade a' spit

good luck

iight uppin for the win!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: heat

wordizzle...i'll break it down

tony
>This battle is bull shit I'm gone win by a large amount.
He says he brings Heat but Water Guns don't count.
-weak....and self glorifyiing :nono: 4/10
>Heat says in a couple months He'll be one of the best that ever lived.
Believeing that is like believing Michael Jackson didn't rape those little kids.
-michael jackson = played to shit 3/10
>So I aint worried bout this kid or that his heat is going to attack us.
You can tell he's wack he mad a crew to recruit all of RV's wack rappers.
-word, i laughed, good personal and best line 8/10
>I Bite niggaz and stay with the heat call me a HammerHead shark.
And bitch you aint Heat you just a fucking fire spark.
weak....5/10

overall: 20/40....not bad man....you have the right idea, but your punches are weak, and some of them played....gotta work on your structure a bit too...keep it consistent for better flow....overall, not that bad...you're getting the hang of it, but you can still elevate quite a bit....keep up man

heat
>I heard you run with cross dressers in Gucci outfits
So your click n drag has nothing to do with computer mouses
-good attempt here....6/10
>No way he’s getting play, with the face of this faggot
Only time he’s bagging chicks…he’s asking “paper or plastic”
set up coulda been worded better 6/10
>i heard u was makin a album, and matter fact pretty soon its droppin..
so imma be burning ya cd.... but i dont mean makin copies
-poor wordplay, nice personal though....5/10
>this niggas like a kindergardeners readin heiroglyphics, u just dont get the 'pic'
even if you was drinkin orange juice,u still couldnt
'concentrate' on a 'grade a' spit
-not bad, decent closer 6/10

overall: 23/40....okay heat, i thought you came without alot of good ideas...but what really ruined your verse for me, was your vocab and wordplay....you had some nice punches/personals, but set ups were whack or wording was poor....but overall, i think you could really get the hang of battling if you keep elevating....work on structure too, spaces aren't really needed inbetween your verse, and keep your lines consistent, same syllable count....aight, not a bad battle, but heat took it

v/heat....no hate

Voted For: Tony Green

iight let me break it down!
Tony Green
He says he brings Heat but Water Guns don't count.
Haha good one I got it his name is heat and heat is also known as guns that was a good line.
Heat says in a couple months he'll be the best that ever lived.
Believing that is like believing Mike Jackson didn't rape those little kids.
That was nice to should of reworded it diffrent thou.
You can tell he's wack he mad crew to recruit all of RV's wack rappers.
HahA good personal that was nice.
And Bitch you aint heat you just a fucking fire spark.
That was a good probably one of the best.

7/10 could of been better but you kept it on point nice shit.

Heat your verse was nice also but your structure was fucked you had a few good personals really liked your last line just you both basically keep elevating heat your verse gets a 6/10 nice battle

v/Tony Green
no hate and don't get n e votes DQ'ed

Voted For: Tony Green

aiight fair battle this is how i saw it...
tony - your verse was pretty good homie..

This battle is bull shit I'm gone win by a large amount.
He says he brings Heat but Water Guns don't count.
^^ this was an aiight opener, coulda been better than "water guns"

Heat says in a couple months He'll be one of the best that ever lived.
Believeing that is like believing Michael Jackson didn't rape those little kids
^^ this was a nice punch hit hard and on target..

So I aint worried bout this kid or that his heat is going to attack us.
You can tell he's wack he mad a crew to recruit all of RV's wack rappers.
^^ aiight bar, coulda worked on it a bit more..

I Bite niggaz and stay with the heat call me a HammerHead shark.
And bitch you aint Heat you just a fucking fire spark.
^^ thats a damn nice finisha good work homie...

Heat - your verse needs structure and betta punches...

I heard you run with cross dressers in Gucci outfits
So your click n drag has nothing to do with computer mouses
^^ that was a pretty weak opener, to played...

No way he’s getting play, with the face of this faggot
Only time he’s bagging chicks…he’s asking “paper or plastic”
^^ thats an aiight bar, you coulda worked on it a bit harder..

i heard u was makin a album, and matter fact pretty soon its droppin..
so imma be burning ya cd.... but i dont mean makin copies
^^ good bar, nice work on dis one... best of ya verse..

this niggas like a kindergardeners readin heiroglyphics, u just dont get the 'pic'
even if you was drinkin orange juice,u still couldnt
'concentrate' on a 'grade a' spit
^^ good finisher.. i liked that...

opener - Tony
closer - Heat
flow - tony
punches - tony
vocab - tony
structure - tony
vote - tony

no hate... its how i saw it... :thumbup:

iight thanxx for voting uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: Tony Green


tony green:
This battle is bull shit I'm gone win by a large amount.
He says he brings Heat but Water Guns don't count.
^^^LOL..OKAY OPENER KIND OF BASIC
Heat says in a couple months He'll be one of the best that ever lived.
Believeing that is like believing Michael Jackson didn't rape those little kids.
^^LOL...DOPE
So I aint worried bout this kid or that his heat is going to attack us.
You can tell he's wack he mad a crew to recruit all of RV's wack rappers.
^^^GOOD PERSONAL COULD OF WORDED IT BETTA THO
I Bite niggaz and stay with the heat call me a HammerHead shark.
And bitch you aint Heat you just a fucking fire spark.
^^WEAK...CLOSER FAM....

heat:
I heard you run with cross dressers in Gucci outfits
So your click n drag has nothing to do with computer mouses
^^VERY CREATIVE FAM...I WAS FEELIN IT
No way he’s getting play, with the face of this faggot
Only time he’s bagging chicks…he’s asking “paper or plastic”
^^LMAOOO...DOPE
i heard u was makin a album, and matter fact pretty soon its droppin..
so imma be burning ya cd.... but i dont mean makin copies
^^^WEAK...SHIT DIDN'T EVEN RYHME GOOD CONCEPT THO
this niggas like a kindergardeners readin heiroglyphics, u just dont get the 'pic'
even if you was drinkin orange juice,u still couldnt
'concentrate' on a 'grade a' spit
^^^NAH FAM....


OKAY...umm is shit is real real close...heat came with some creativity and good concepts but didn't really word his bars good so dat fukked em up...no personals either...but tony green came with some funny ass lines and had at least 1 personal and he was consistant...so he gets my vote

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Thannx Marv really appreciate it uppin fo the win!

upp'in for honest vote cuz some of these just dont seem honest to me

What the fuck aint honest bout them your getting ripped 3-1