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heat 03-23-05 07:27 PM

it ends witht his
 
By making this connection with you,
I'm not trying to rekindle our past.
But ultimately, I'm giving us a conclusion.
Closing and locking the doors of our relationship which have been swinging back and forth since the day I met you.
I know for certain that you and me would impossibly exist.
It's simply not written in our fates.
But within the depths of my soul,
I have a glimmer of you that needs to be snuffed.
Or I will forever be taunted and tortured by your small but ever shining light in my life
So before I make choices….
That therefore consequently the probability of me ever seeing you again is small,
On a night of destiny I wish to inhale insanity into my body and exhale all my inhibitions.
And to close your swinging door into my life I know I must first explore everything that door conceals…
Your mind, body, and soul.

Lyriclesolja 03-23-05 07:41 PM

Nice poem........i liked that you didnt rhyme shows you have origionality....i liked the deepness it leaves the reader wanting more...........nice metas you really struck gold there...............Great poem........9/10.......keep it coming with peaces like this!
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heat 03-24-05 07:19 AM

thanks for the feed back fam upp'in

Macca 03-24-05 08:31 AM

Very imaginative and I liked your woring and I could see alot coming from you. Just fix some things. Like structure and Title. :D RTF
you'll like my poems

fluidmoon 03-24-05 04:45 PM

I liked this a lot, this was a good freewrite,with no forged rhyming pattern, i liked your vocabulary, and how you came across in your desired direction, keep dropping man..1


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