First Keystle Peep and rate this!!
 

The amount of girls in my world,
Was phenomenal,
Paid 10 quid to take this girl,
Down to dominoes,
And still got a slice,
Of the pizza and the pussy,
Beggin me to come bak,
When i moved on to her sister,
Ringin me hollarin,
"Please Strife I miss ya"
I ent writtin this track,
Jus' to diss ya,
Even tho now i know you got a mister,
Compared to my mistress,
The judges would dismiss,
All yo' chances,
No second glances,
I told ya wee don't need no more fat asses,
Most girls be walkin round,
Cross eyed an' wearin glasses,
But i always had dis cutie on 4th,
Prepared to suck my dick,
An' take me all places but north,
Ah shit,
How could i forget her first time,
She started bleedin,
An' ran home cryin,
Ya'll got it wrong,
Thinkin' dis was gonna be a lovey-dovey song,
I ain't sisqo,
An' dont wear no thong.

it was ight a decent try. the structure or rhyme scheme wasnt really there. it did pick up though after the peice got going, but alot of kats may talk down n this peice cause the begining isnt that great. either way stay up and keep elvating.
joey