Black vs Tony Green
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No d/r votes
No Hate votes

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-24-05 at 01:53 PM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

Tony Green has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-24-05 01:35 PM.

BLACK has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-24-05 01:41 PM.

I'll treat you like another planet and put you outta this world.
My shells gone make your blood drip like gel from rick james curl.
You try to guess what I'm gone say but my style to clever.
You claim that you king but you rank 76 like webber*
You better play your position, otherwise you'll be missing, found dead in the river now you sleepin with fishes.
No Problem with the scraps I'll let them get ate by pigeons.
Black serve niggaz with an open mouth like he work at a diner.
My lyrics just left you burning like your moms vagina.

*Chris Webber played for the kings now the 76er's.

iight den..da flow dont stop nigga!

u tony green wit no money must be an oximoron
im black wit bread so dats an oximoron
u weaka than mike jordan boots so imma kill you
u a cock suckin fag ass, crab niggaz will drill u
and dont talk bout me and expect punches to land
cuz 99.9% of tha time u be wrong, read ya verse and do da math
im a punchline away from makin dis fag beg mercy
learn how to spell "muthafucka" before u try to approach me*

*..im his PM he spelled muthafucka "muhfukka"..fag

im done
ur turn bitch!

Now I see why you are 0-8 uppin for the win and you say your a King haha.
And you spell it like "MotherFucker" if you wanna be correct you made your own shit look dumb talkin bout spellin shit and you spelled it wrong. HAHA!

oh shut tha fuck up
cocksucka
u jus be my RV bitch

Why would you want another man to be your bitch u r gay as hell!

This was feedback posted for Tony Green
 

......checkin feed...................good verse tony...fuck BLACK...u betta come wit something harder for me BLACK

Thanxx fam uppin fo votes so I can get my win!!!!

Voted For: Tony Green

tony wins.

black no punches...a lot of blah.

tony yours was aight..u beat him in every area,beta punches,metas,structure.etc
a poor battle but tony u had enough to beat black with ease

Voted For: Tony Green

tony green
I'll treat you like another planet and put you outta this world.
My shells gone make your blood drip like gel from rick james curl.
You try to guess what I'm gone say but my style to clever.
You claim that you king but you rank 76 like webber*
You better play your position, otherwise you'll be missing, found dead in the river now you sleepin with fishes.
No Problem with the scraps I'll let them get ate by pigeons.
Black serve niggaz with an open mouth like he work at a diner.
My lyrics just left you burning like your moms vagina.

like da chris webber line
lotz of punches
nice structure
6.5/10

black


iight den..da flow dont stop nigga!

u tony green wit no money must be an oximoron
im black wit bread so dats an oximoron
u weaka than mike jordan boots so imma kill you
u a cock suckin fag ass, crab niggaz will drill u
and dont talk bout me and expect punches to land
cuz 99.9% of tha time u be wrong, read ya verse and do da math
im a punchline away from makin dis fag beg mercy
learn how to spell "muthafucka" before u try to approach me*

*..im his PM he spelled muthafucka "muhfukka"..fag

iight verse
not as many punches
work on structure and dont cram lyrics in lines
no hate
5/10

my v/ tony green

This was feedback posted for Tony Green
 

Tony G took ths one. Big time. Better mettas and better rhyming. I see you still elevating Tony, but your wordplay is still lacking, along wit some of ur structure. work on the same amount of syllables in each line. and work on how you word your lines. structure was off too. still a lil bit of stretched lines, but I think you had the overall better verse.
black-not a bad verse, but Tony took this one big time.. he got you, and I think you kno. he just came more prepared and more skilled in this one. black, work on yo structure too homie. same thing as I said for tony, but your problem was, it didnt have enough word (wordplay bad too), and you verse seemed scattered. work on harder hitting punches, a punch usually is a full bar, but b4 you work on that, try to get ur structure up, then focus on personals Its ok to take a lil time out to write a verse, to find some personals. next time dont try to rush ur verse.
overall-ya'll still need elevating, and I can see ur both on the right track, just try and work on ur structure, thats everything in text battling. well, tha most imporatant part. it depends on how the voter reads it, to see who they think won. but I'm not guna vote on this battle, cuase it hasnt been a week since we both been NOK sober..lol..but keep all the feedback in mind, and elevate urself.

~1~

Uppin to the top should be a KO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: Tony Green

aight tony gets this he had better structure,better flow,
sum good punches,good opener black i wasnt feelin yer shit didnt like yer rymes to plain elevate dogg but good drop both yall but tony gets this