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lyricalflowz vs Nostradamus
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Topical Topic: Moment Of Truth 20 - 32 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Dickriding Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 04-02-05 at 10:19 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. |
lyricalflowz has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-30-05 10:53 AM.
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Nostradamus has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-30-05 10:58 AM.
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"Even the worst individuals have emotions"
Look,
Alright lets get it started.. My mind is through the sky.. It aint right but why fight? Tonights like do or die.. I might, make it out, and have a story to tell.. Its pouring aswell, but fuck having a morning of hell.. Man-- The plan is on a list, I gotta take off a hit.. I aint shaking and shit, but I guess that I'm aching a bit.. (So this is it?) "Yeah just drop me off on the corner.." (Are you a stalker?) "Piss off cunt, I'ma reporter.." (Oh ok..) "Well anyway, here take ya money" "Keep the engine running bro dont try anything funny" (Alright alright, for this cash, I'm here all night) "Youll get paid when I'm out, you better know how to drive" Right, so theres the taxi, actually it was quiet.. No lights at the side, everythings perfect when I arrive.. I.. Checked the back way, their missing the plot.. The door opened before I started picking the lock.. It was amazing, I just steped up and checked the window.. Fucka set up, dudes smoking bongs and playing nintendo.. Ok.. I got a plan, I picked up his bong.. Dried the top off, so I could put some arsenic on.. But just to make sure, I parked my ass straight on his lawn.. Pulled a silenced colt out, I was starting to yawn.. Before I knew it, one dude came out in a coat.. Wait FUCK no.. Your shittin me, some chicks havin a smoke.. What the fuck.. Lady luck has a weird way of working.. I aint out to put an innocent girl inside a herce man.. Fuck that.. But I didnt step out, I'd have to shoot.. I just watch the girl slowly get sick, I couldnt move.. The dude ran out, suddenly tears came to his eyes.. As I remain in disguise, the girl just painfully dies.. --BANG-- Who got shot? Youll have to take a guess.. Theres a moment of truth.. Would YOU choose to end all the stress? |
Voted For: Nostradamus
Aiight ... this was actually close... LF: I would say your better at text, but not bad at topicals either... You had the vocabulary out of both the verses... but the 3 things i look for most in a topical battle are imagery, Creativity, And emotion. Your emotion wasnt too bad, but your story line was like everybody else. You didnt come original and i hate verses like that. And your imagery was decent but you werent vivid or descriptive enough Overall: 6.5/10 Nos: Your verse definately took the categories of creativity and imagery. You came from a different angle for the topic, and thats what im looking for. It was original yet simple. Your emotion was OK but wasnt much there except for last couple lines. Vocab wasnt really there but you took all the other categories here so you got my vote. Vote: Nos please return the favor with an honest vote on a battle in my sig! |
Voted For: Nostradamus
you win, your flow was way better and it was alot easier to read, i also thought your verse was alot more over all beter NOS, you had good strucutre and your lines werent strechted, you also had alot better feel to the topic and came alot more orignal, you cuold have had a lil more emotion but your story telling was good, it would have sounded alot better if you where rapping this, but good vocab and great use of the topic, you could have put and applied alot more effort to this, but pretty decent, although i have read better from you flow, you are really getting better at this topical shit, maybe we shoulf battle eachother it shoudl be a good battle, but i can also see you spitten this alot better than ow it is written, it has alot of flow to it which is good, i kinda got bored fo your shit but your story was good and had more emotion just that i got bored, just try to shorten your lines and add alot more metaphores in this shit and it will be doper vote=NOS |
This was feedback posted for lyricalflowz
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This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
chizz neckin this out.........like whoa...........
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This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
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fuck it.. I'm gonna.. i was feelin lyricals piece, shit was mad deep & emotional (I dunno what ^^ duke is on about).. sorta fell off & got borin in parts tho, but then picked it back up.. & yeh shit was sorta predictable and cliche.. 7 / 10 Nos' piece was str8.. the suspense was gr8, how he lead up to the climax n shit.. I wasn't really feelin the conversational shit, but i guess thats aight 4 the imagery n shit, (I'll say its ill when the conversational shit fits in wit the rhymescheme & actually rhymes) but yeh.. i'll gyve 7.2 4 his verse therefore.. my vote = Nostradamus seemed lyke he thought more about his verse than lyrical & it showed nahmean.. take it or eat it RespecK 1 |
This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
Deep shit. I think you guna take this one due to more creativitie and emotion in yo verse. I was feelin urs more, and I kinda get the feelin this is guna be a one sided battle.
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Voted For: Nostradamus
wow man... seriously... Nostra just took this... having never read any of your previous work I had no idea what to expect and to tell the truth I was impressed by both no doubt. But Nostra's story was so damn nice... flowed well... pretty much had everything perfect or near perfect, and as good as lyrical's verse was... it just couldn't compete with that masterpeice. Damn... got into that like whoa... good battle y'all and lyrical keep ya head up man u did good... just nostra was better in this one. |
Voted For: Nostradamus
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