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why celebrate history?
Why is it that we allways remember war..celebrate them as if murder we adore
why is it that kids need to celebrate murder that they havent even hear a? places like horishima seem to be remembred..yet not learnt from this is a peice of my heart....so In a way its a burnt song........ 19th century..romans fight for freedom..discretion in 2000 isnt taught did man really land on the moon....or did he just convert a desert spot truth in our history pages has been missing for ages..rages of lies fall from our sky's lady liberty isnt much but a scam..to make america never want to ask why industrial like chemicals rain from the sky..to blow up another humans land and we still clap..laugh and praise the beast in command should i turn a blind eye? should i never ask why? or should I speak whats on my mind...am I a lonley kind? Theres an answer to every question..true history..is what I will find negative times..we forced to remind the war veterans of the pain and suffering they went thru but if you didnt die...would they world simply forget you is history really that bright...or is it as dark as an african night? people need to look towards the furtue..but learn from the mistake human race walking backwards while tryna reach the future...soon to just hit breaks will my children be born into a world that see's bush as a saviour cause really he hasnt done anyone a favour he gave more hurt to an allready struggling society I want our real history books...why do leader lie to me what are you tryna hide? why are certain pages had ink spilt on them whats wrong with them?do i not belong with them... How can we get along with them? when the truth...seems to allways be gone Any topical heads who can tell me how to get better? |
upping for some muther fucking feed back yall!!!
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now dats truth...more like a poem to me but if u get tha right beat and record it...dopeness mos def...8/10 jus for speakin tha truth fam...stay real
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heyu yo thanks for that feed nigkah.
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This was a pretty nice peice... i was really feeling it ,
Structure was alittle messed up though, really needa work on that... Try to match your lines up, cuz some times it throws the reader off.. You had lots of feeling and Nice emotions on this drop.. Really was nice , just elevate on structure and alittle bit on wordplay.. and you'll be fine ..keep it up Ps:Drop a link to an OM' you have left feedback on or this will be closed |
werd on the feed ma nigkah
heres ya link http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=184644 lets get some more on this! |
19th century..romans fight for freedom..discretion in 2000 isnt taught
did man really land on the moon....or did he just convert a desert spot ^^^NICE LINE truth in our history pages has been missing for ages..rages of lies fall from our sky's lady liberty isnt much but a scam..to make america never want to ask why ^^^DECENT industrial like chemicals rain from the sky..to blow up another humans land and we still clap..laugh and praise the beast in command ^^^IIGHT should i turn a blind eye? should i never ask why? or should I speak whats on my mind...am I a lonley kind? Theres an answer to every question..true history..is what I will find ^^^GOOD negative times..we forced to remind the war veterans of the pain and suffering they went thru but if you didnt die...would they world simply forget you ^^^Hmmmm.... NICE LINE VERY THOUGHTFUL is history really that bright...or is it as dark as an african night? people need to look towards the furtue..but learn from the mistake human race walking backwards while tryna reach the future...soon to just hit breaks ^^^GOOD will my children be born into a world that see's bush as a saviour cause really he hasnt done anyone a favour ^^^DAMN RIGHT BUSH AINT DONE SHIT! he gave more hurt to an allready struggling society I want our real history books...why do leader lie to me ^^^NICE LINE what are you tryna hide? why are certain pages had ink spilt on them whats wrong with them?do i not belong with them... ^^^GOOD How can we get along with them? when the truth...seems to allways be gone ^^^ NICE CLOSURE real good topical homie u had lotz of lines in dere dat really made me think i liked ur word choice and lyrics good topic chosen, very thoughtful u pretty good at topicals homie stay up 8.5/10 .........1 |
damn....truth spoken in dis 1...i really enjoyed it. it kinda reminded me of 'pac in the way it was real to tha core in some parts but at tha same time it made me think of Common cuz it had great consistancy. vocab could always be betta 4 any rapper no matta how good u are but still this is a given for OM of tha month....stay up & rtf.1.
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i was really feelin this bruh.
flowed nicely and good expanded vocab used,only thing a little thing a bit off was the structure. the best om ive read in a minute, nice drop, keep doin ya thing. rtf. |
thanks for the feedback.
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that shit was inspiring open my eyes to the econmy and the whole bush administration was very good keep it up my nigga
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