"My Hatred" - Feedback Please
 

I just wrote this in a half an hour or so, maybe longer, feedback please people,

Yo I got beefs on my hands, I avoid a fight,
It seems that im in a tunnel and at the end no light,
It seems like I keep running round the track still no end in site,
It seems not safe to be out at dark, after light,
Cause Im growing older by the day, I wanna keep away from strife,
Cause in the time on earth you only get one life,
Blow it and you don’t get a sequel, there is no living twice,
I try to be myself theres no equal, conducting myself nice,
Cause with all this im sick of this unmeaningness,
All this nonsensical chat means nothing to me,
The hatred I have for these people is incommunicable,
Cause if you fuck with me my hate for you is indescribable,
I will strike like clockwork precision, I will be Mr. Regularity,
To the ones in question I hope its clear this is supposed to be clarity,
When it come to you, Im operating intent,
Cause you’re a fag, go get bent,
Cause in reflection of this situation, I just end up mad,
As if Im looking in the mirror and my reflection is screaming back,

Cause Ive found out things about you, I know them for a fact, Cause when this is said and done youll be wishing you could turn the time back,
In this scenario, Ive been hesitant, paused before replying,
Cause if I said I really wanted to have to do shit Id be lying,
Im gonna make you screech like a crow, bellow with ache and sufferance,
Cause after its done ill be the one having one over,
But inside I expect Ill still feel some discomposure,
Cause what have you achieved by trying to offend me,
Nothing more than just another bitter enemy,
Cause the way I feel im will to do whatever, readily,
But Im still not about to get caught Im a pro, I operate cleverly,
Not like the person in question my foe, who operates sporadically,
No prior planning acting on nothing but misjudgement,
This verse has been some what of a vent,
To spit out my anger and dissent,
Cause Ive said it once before go get bent,

Feedback please good or bad,
:)

The gap in the middle shouldnt be there, I dont know why its done that, tried to alter it but it wouldnt do it,

good
 

i think it was good from what i understood but you jump topic

Thanks for the feed man, much appreciated,

Uppin for more:)

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
 

Uppin