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Leavin Me Collab. Featuring Sheela
This is a piece i wrote with a girl i know named sheela...not my best piece by far, but enjoy anyways
In - Vision I hate you so much, this shit is drivin me crazy.. I'd kill you right now if it had no ties to my baby.. Everytime i see you, I'm filled with so much rage.. found our notebook, and than ripped every page.. every night I wish, i could erase the day i met you.. so i wouldn't play this game of cherades and guess who.. I can't even think about you, without losin my temper.. maybe i could murder you, and nobody'd remember.. That can't work, your the garden of my seed.. I must spare you, even if your heart doesn't bleed.. i don't understand, why you'd ever put me through this.. allowing myself to know you, is wasteful and stupid.. I should of known when i saw you, you were out of my range.. why didnt I see past the beauty, and see the clouds and the rain.. Now i'm stuck with this feeling, of hatred so strong.. but a love so powerful, our heart beats to a song.. the melody sings to us, as it pumps through our veigns.. and the hatred comes in, cause our love ain't the same.. My love is so much stronger, and you've gotta believe me.. If it's death , lust, or money, i hate knowing you'll leave me.. maybe our child, will help me make it through.. the fear we won't be together, is why i hate you Sheela u must have thought that i was stupid when u told me u loved me why u think i changed the pages after i carried ur seed?? u got all violent for nothing and i didn't see what for everytime i said i'd be right back u rushed to the door i hate it when u dont believe me cuz i'm tellin the truth ur scaring me now, creeping thru crowds like i won't know it's u my mama told me not to trust u but i did anyway praying to God, Jehovah, Allah, hoping He could make u stay when i found out the news, u gave me a gift I never wanted to lose u started givin ultimatums tellin me i better choose choose what?? thats ur child are being for real?? i thought u loved us, but i see, now ur threats are to kill i never said i stopped loving u, but i think i should leave dont want my child growing up to be deranged like his daddy |
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don't sleep on this...it turned out pretty decent.
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ya not your best piece, the girl was ok, it wasn't bad though, it was decent, I wasn't really feeling the concept of the verse though, flow was good though, blah, decent vocab, liked the rhyme scheme, wasn't that deep, I didnt look like you got into it when you were writing it, but overall, it wasn't that bad, 8/10
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