diman vs the metaphor
 

Battle Rules:

8- 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 50

Check in by: 04-09-05 at 03:18 PM

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the metaphor has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-06-05 03:19 PM.

diman has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-06-05 03:39 PM.

leave shells in diman,like his moms when they got taco night/
you aint eatin me in battle kid, im pretty tough to bite/
you's a whack nigga only time you was diman/
is when you agreed to drink your brothers semen/
see man im to nasty for you, like black jellybeans/
raps not in u like a nigga wearing wrangler,its not your genes/
u whack head and shoulders,the only time u win by a hair/
so respon if u dare/

pssshh, 3 days for 10 lines?


meta udilizing a W, is like Soc favorin skriptz.
thinkin his words are weapons, yea like 50 with paper clips.
its not nature its...emabarrassing, that sig of yours.
i feel like its english class. lesson one, tackle the metaphor.
its been said before, but i truely will take this quickly.
ya like a graphic battle, ya drop ya best & still wont diss me.
i feel like debo, for no reason i wanna inflict a beating.
a battle with meta?... homework sounds more intriguing.
ya not clearly thinking, like a spur of the moment wife.
im mean shit, how gangsta is naming yaself after a poetic device?

uppin, to the top.......... fuck the 50 character rule

uppin, to the top

my fualt how i ened it uh com stared messin up

Voted For: diman

Flow: Blah
Punches: Diman
Personals: Diman
Wordplay: Metaphor
Metas: Metaphor
Multis: Blah
Enjoyment: Both i guess

Vote Diman

Explanation: He just came with harder punches that were way more direct .. but metaphor you have potential stay elevating just need to get more personal ya kno ... stay elevating stay up ..1

Return The Favor ......................... With An Honest Explained Vote Please

thanks kin. uppin for another vote.

god, its damn hard to get a response on RV. no remorse though.

Voted For: diman

aight,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,easy-peasy

metaphor
>leave shells in diman,like his moms when they got taco night/
you aint eatin me in battle kid, im pretty tough to bite/
^aight set up....2nd line was bunk 3/10
>you's a whack nigga only time you was diman/
is when you agreed to drink your brothers semen/
^do demons drink their brothers semen regularly? 3/10
>see man im to nasty for you, like black jellybeans/
raps not in u like a nigga wearing wrangler,its not your genes/
horrible structure, and what if he likes black jellybeans? 2/10
>u whack head and shoulders,the only time u win by a hair/
so respon if u dare/
decent set up....you coulda at least maybe a better threat 3/10

overall: 11/40....uh, you need to elevate everything, find out what a decent punch is, use REAL personals if you can, dont self glorify....work a whole crap load on structure, flow was okay....vocab was hella basic along with wordplay....so, elevate

diman
>meta udilizing a W, is like Soc favorin skriptz.
thinkin his words are weapons, yea like 50 with paper clips.
decent 6/10
>its not nature its...emabarrassing, that sig of yours.
i feel like its english class. lesson one, tackle the metaphor.
haha, decent 7/10
>its been said before, but i truely will take this quickly.
ya like a graphic battle, ya drop ya best & still wont diss me.
HAHA, this one had me LOL'ing, 8/10
>i feel like debo, for no reason i wanna inflict a beating.
a battle with meta?... homework sounds more intriguing.
not bad again, laughed a little 7/10
>ya not clearly thinking, like a spur of the moment wife.
im mean shit, how gangsta is naming yaself after a poetic device?
haha, solid closer...good shit 7/10

overall: 35/50....not a bad verse diman, keep up, you had some pretty witty/clever punches and it seems like you are on the right track/have a hang of text battling....you could improve on structure thought, and use personals....word, keep up yo, solid verse all round, hit me up sometime if you want ;)

v/diman

ok sabre respect ur vote but the one line is diman as in theman if u dont understand the wordplay dont vote

cmon, easy battle... takes a minute to explain.