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Dream or reality?
in my mind i visualize myself with you i need your touch in my heart i realize reality without you just aint enough i just cant imagine me without you my life's purpose is to be about you i feel you in my sleep; when i'm awake i dream about you i need to have you i want you bad wuts me without you your my passion my soul my lungs Dream I cant breathe without you see i'm not ashamed to express myself and let you know that i'm complete when we meet and dont wanna let you go not even hell can stop me from feelin the way i feel so I'll just Dream and pray and Dream til my Dream's fulfilled you make me whole you'll take my soul if you go away but if you do Dream i'm positive you'll be back one day reality's a bitch baby it's crazy how it takes control breaks my soul then back comes the dream-it makes me whole i'm so complete you make me weak when i see you i cant speak you're unique your mystique brings my feelings to a peak then you go away again- meant to be or just friends? real to see or pretend? still my love for you transcends until you come back again still you're my vitality yet still there's no finality are you Dream or reality? |
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ay wut tha fuck......uppin dis shit
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uppin................
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give me some fuckin feed
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aight your biggest downfall in my opinion is your VOCABULARY.
dont use you/you/you/do/do/you/.....its very annoyin for readers. i got ya story line n the point ya were trying to convey... you lacked on the emotion a bit...but its mainly cause of ya vocab n lack of descriptional words.....you got the right idea now just work on producing a imAge to ya reader..... keep dropping.........pz.....RTF |
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