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Xplosion 04-07-05 10:54 PM

Sum Thin I Wrote For Ma Girl...
 
Yo Structers Off But Its Good I think Her Names Sam SO when You Read THat Juss Remember Aiight...

Yo…
I don’t kno what im gunna do in love since I layed eyes on you
But so caught up in this bullshit I don’t kno if I can comit
To this relationship I have to admit with out you I couldn’t make it
… …don’t kno if I made a mistake or if its fake for heavens sake Help me out… worst part of my life but tha best Im so stressed depressed
but yet im so obsessed Your so beautiful im impressed
ive neva seen sumone as fine Your One of a kind Neva seen somebody shine
like you … Your worth a million N nine I aint worth a fucken dime
Your better than me you agree? no? I disagree
I treat you as good as can I guarantee shitty boyfriend admit this
Its hard to belive you even exisit your perfect all I do is sit here and remineiss About ~**YOU**~ im in love your way above Tha sky….
your like a flower that blooms in December or June Your brighter than the moon your sharper than a harpoon When im with you girl nutthin can go wrong
I LUV YOU SOOO MUCH that’s why I wrote this song
To just show you I want you to really think I want it to sink
in your head like I said I REALLY LUV YOU, I LUV TO KISS YOU HOLD YOU AND HUG YOU I NEVA WANT TO LET GO! But yo…If only I could freeze time juss so
I can show How much I honestly love you that’s juss how I roll
this is what im facin You give me motivation I
love you girl you make ma life complete Everyday I see you
….my hearts skips a beat I LUV YOU SAM!!!! But damn
…this rap game runes lifes been in since I was eleven
I guess im blessed I gotta girl from heaven
Id do anything for her fall of tha end of tha world
Even when we kiss I make her feet curl…ha - ha
I gotta lotta frustration You give me ma acceleration
to make it threw tha day without facin A misinterpretation you’re a fascination that everybody’s chasin If I could I would be with you forever
neva say neva blah blah whatever However
rite now im makin myself a fool your goin on to high school
Im writen these rhymes now juss to show you how Much sum one loves you WOW Damn…. I LUV YOU SOOOOOO MUCH SAM!!!!


FeedBack Yall!!

Yo This Wasnt Meant To Rhyme EveryLine It Was More Of A Verse To A Song...So Its Not Like In Structure...

Word.^

Xplosion 04-08-05 04:12 PM

Bump Bump BUmp^^

¤ÐÅž¤ 04-08-05 04:48 PM

THIS SHOULDA ALMOST BEEN POSTED IN THE POETRY SECTION....
I GOT 3 QUARTERS THE WAY THROUGH BUT ITS JUST TO DAMN
TOUGH TO FLOW TO............edit n fix the structure n im sure you'll
get more feedback on ya piece homie....pz....RTF

Xplosion 04-08-05 04:56 PM

Was It Good Tho?

¤ÐÅž¤ 04-08-05 05:04 PM

ya it was koo for a free...like it seemed like it was written to a beat...cuz its choppy...
but..i dont get what you meran you"think her name is sam"..did you write this????
cuz it just seems odd you writing it n not knowing her name..."get me"???
but ya it had some decent lines...not my cuppa joe but iut was aight.....
try doing topicals homie...hone your skills in n practice ya structure...pz

Xplosion 04-08-05 05:17 PM

Dawg Its A Song I Made Thats Juss Tha First Verse It Goes To A Beat And My Girls Name Is Sam I Made It For Her Lol...

¤ÐÅž¤ 04-08-05 05:23 PM

kk, it was just you said I THINK HER NAME IS SAM..rolf...no worries homie

~Sundance Kid~ 04-08-05 05:55 PM

this was a cool peice. you had some good flows on the end. (You give me ma acceleration
to make it threw tha day without facin A misinterpretation you’re a fascination that everybody’s chasin) nice............

Xplosion 04-08-05 10:48 PM

Thanks BUmp BUmp...

Politi-Kill 04-08-05 10:59 PM

"rite now im makin myself a fool your goin on to high school''
how old are ya'll?

i wasnt feelin this....wasnt too bad of a joint...just didnt like the flow and this aint my tipe a' topic....keep up though

Xplosion 04-09-05 01:11 AM

im 13 homie...

BUmp BUmp

Politi-Kill 04-09-05 03:58 AM

i guess that made sense then...yea it wasnt bad but a little repeatative

Xplosion 04-16-05 11:14 PM

Bump...................................


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