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¤ÐÅž¤ vs REDZONE
Battle Rules:
10-Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting gotta admit the noob was persistent and annoyin with his PM'S ....you remind me of cali................ Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 04-09-05 at 03:59 AM Must drop verse in 240 minutes after check in. DQ'ed.. drop 10 bars instead of 10 lines |
REDZONE has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-09-05 03:48 AM.
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¤ÐÅž¤ has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-09-05 03:51 AM.
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persistence is tha key, what Red annoying you kid//
scared ta tha fact thata newbie will be responsible fa destroyin you kid//1 this nigga is clappin wit mah reaction, yea this nigga is packin// you simply be lackin satisfaction once mah rhymes be attackin//2 put it together, I'll leave spread apart like puzzles and hoes// you accepted tha battle, I'm jus tha trouble you chose//3 I'll leave you exposed, viewing ya body like ya one of tha pope's// climbin tha ladder while you struggle at tha end of ya rope//4 RedZone be tha name, it's pain when bodies droppin like rain// Daz can get it too, pussy couldn't even get in tha way of stoppin mah gain//5 yea you postin ta death, soon I'll roast you ta death// nuthin left but a bloody mess gun crackin keep tha witnesses deaf//6 really homie this newbie hard, ask ya conscience tha question// you should be seen respectin this KING thas a valuable lesson//7 c'mon cuz Imma G so wisely handle ya choosin// mah thesis sentence murdaz ya topic, watch me complete ya conclusion//8 while I'm improvin, all ya sucka is movin and losin// desert eagle allow me that shootin while you run fa regroupin//9 I'll leave ya brain slidin down ya throwback, might as well spray ya man nigga// It's RedZone you'll (R)est (I)n (P)eace when I say you can nigga//10 |
Redzone?..... Handle ya own? nah, couldn’t match my text if it was my thread ya cloned Ya should be head-in-home, cuz ya lines aint connectin like dead-cellphones Skill n you aint ever fitting zone…n how you hard when ya .spitten foam ? These punches’ll cut ya flow off worse then getting fuckin…kidney stones You spittin retarted? Slow? or are you just repeatin what the dumb havta say I hate preyin(pray)on the(week)weak but worship is monday through son-day You fake thugs dont move me…. easily take ya lugz n cheep jewelry you winning.? Ask around, RV’ll say get outta town like a country movie Listen here, your battle tactics are ya downfall kinda like ….whitney’s a-rears…. N i can’t take ya raps seriously cuz ya beat(s) associaciated with briney spears If you didn’t know ”redzone ia a beat producer for Britney spears” That is all,if you don’t get it….(your dumb)..and don’t vote…. |
This was feedback posted for REDZONE
this was ok for a noob (i'm aware i'm a noob to) but the flow was off and u werent throwin anu punches...more self -glorifiyin then battle
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he said he was'nt a noob...i wish ya'll wouldnt lie to yaselves
i told ya i didnt wanna merk ya man....oh n you dropped 20 lines not 10.....so basically you lost as soon as you posted...no beef you'll get better with tyme, just gotta earn how to construct punches.. |
it's whateva
once I get tha hang of yall rules I'll find ya again
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Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤
daz took this one hands down. better punches and shit, and nice wordplay. bUT, i gave u tha vote because yo multies killed his whole verse and any attempt he tried to use. Red Zone, your verse seemed a lil poorly flowed, and simple. U didnt come hard wit tha punches or anything else of that matter. Daz took this one hands down... RTF(DONE) And, That was a weak ass battle, I underrated him, and It worked out fine.lol... -peace |
Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤
Handle ya own? nah, couldn’t match my text if it was my thread ya cloned Ya should be head-in-home, cuz ya lines aint connectin like dead-cellphones You spittin retarted? Slow? or are you just repeatin what the dumb havta say I hate preyin(pray)on the(week)weak but worship is monday through son-day vs Nothing... ...basically a one-sided vote, ¤ÐÅž¤ just had harder punches, a good flow, structure was okay, and the vocab was aight... REDZONE... ...basically you need to fix your structure, get rid of the brackets ( // ), don't number it, cuz half of RV aint stupid, make some harder punches & add personas up in there, but all i have to tell you is that elevate more... RTF ¤ÐÅž¤... ...on one of my battles |
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