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Golden Dayz vs Lay-Text
Topical Rules:
30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Hopefull votes (people trying out for your crew) No Feeding (taking my idea) Topic: Coins in the Air Minimum posts to vote: 250 Check in by: 04-13-05 at 09:23 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Golden Dayz has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-12-05 09:40 AM.
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Lay-Text has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-12-05 06:22 PM.
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Lay-Text has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-12-05 06:24 PM.
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Blue and white mixes and surrounds me with air, cares and worries disappear as if I am in the middle of nowhere. I care for nothing and my time melts away, the open space soothes my mind and my day. No money, no women, no restrictions on any time, No rhymes, no crimes, and decisions no longer ruin great finds. Value has no importance and nothing will be priced, lives no longer depend on the chances of a pair of dice. In this paradise, I wish to remain and never go back, to the track of circles where people lounge and eat big macs. Why do people choose to live where gravity rules your life, where you fight over some person who you later call a dyke? Simple, and care free is how I wish to be, I am no longer tie down by what used to constrict me Like vines around my neck choking me for every breath I have, when I reached out people would move so I have nothing to grab. Dishonesty and no loyalty made of men and their pride, confide in each other when they know it will make people cry. Ego's, amigos, and enemies all alike, fight between each other and try to be on top in life. With grass up to heads and sweat on your face, a race to the top of a mountain which only ends in disgrace. Face to face with creatures which will lie and say things amazing, and you listen to people complain about their lives through rapping Words into syllables and writing poetry that depresses young ones, tells them that they have to suffer before they can have fun. To have barriers of cultures to form many worlds, where do they come from? Where their most prized possessions will be worth what they live on. Coins in the air falling to the ground breaking more than one barrier, Lands right in the head of the drug, beer, and AIDS carrier. |
Experimental Explosions..Erupt The Center Core of The Earth.. The Meer Existence Is Dim of The Next Generations Birth.. I Put Forth..The Time and Effort To Find The Newest Resoultion.. To Stop This Disaster..And Save The World From Volancin Polution.. Scientific Fusion..Artificial Intelligence Can Only Help So Much.. To Stop Mother Nature Its Gonna Take That of A Humans Touch.. I Perplex The Complex Evolution of Formulas Dealin With Genetics.. Keep The Prospetic Future Trapped Within Understrucable Relics.. The Revalations of Christ Are Signed Through Unexplainable Acts.. And Now Hells Chambers Are Rising Through Mile Wide Cracks.. Theres To Much To Contemplate..My Stomach Is About To Ovulate.. I Look In The Mirror and The Spirits Say Death Is All Our Fate.. It Can't Be True..And To Me He Says Its All Because Of You.. I Don't Know What To Do..For 3 Days The Moon Has Been Blue.. My Life-Line Is Through...But Wait... The Devils Advocate Appears At My Gate Eyes With Raged Hate.. Blacker Than Slate..and Told Me That Surving Is Just Too Late.. "We Can Combine Our Worlds, Let The Good and Evil Collide.. Just Abide By My Directions..And A Truce Will Be Justified." Now I...Sit In The Chambers Surronded By Demonic Strangers.. Trapped Witin Danger..To Make A Solution Beyond My Thoughts.. I'm So Distraught..So Tired of This Roiting Plagued Spot.. Maybe If We Had Another Shot..Fuck I Lost My Train of Thought.. "The Time Has Come Forth..Shall We Agree or Draw Swords? Go Against Me and Live In A Scorture With Eternal Torture." To Live In A World Where Curupt Violence Will Surface Again.. or To Fight This War Not Knowing Which One Will Live To Reign.. Come On Think..My Consciece Shall Not Fail Me..What To Do?.. I Can't Do It On My Own..So I'ma Leave This Up To You.. What Should We Choose? ~R~ |
Wasn't sure if you were gonna drop in time R. Good luck.
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Yea Me Either..I Wasn't Even Gonna Show At All...I Have A Date Tonight and Shit...I Just Wasn't Motivated.
But Yea Goodluck Man. ~R~ |
I know what ya mean. I didn't really have much motivation, I had to leave in 20 min.
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Voted For: Lay-Text
Well i think this battle was pretty much one sided... Golden dayz i have seen alot better from you and your first 16 lines were just basic i was hoping for alot more but you didnt show me anything... the last last were good and you dealt more on the imagery asp[ect but you didnt stay consistent with the emotion or imagery throughout the whole verse and thats where you went wrong Lay-Text: You had a pretty solid piece i have seen better from you as well... i was a bit dissapointed but you still brung enough to the table to win thie battle.. you had better imagery and the emotion was ok but you werent really creative you let your vocabulary take over and that can hurt a verse and you know that but it was still solid enough to win this battle vote: Lay-Text |
How did he even follow the topic anyway? I re read his verse, and I still don't see how he followed the topic.
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Voted For: Golden Dayz
lol... curious ta peep this battle after the thread in LL Lay-Text, good imagery, good creativity, not enuff ta win the battle... you went off topic repeatdly with lines such as: ''I Don't Know What To Do..For 3 Days The Moon Has Been Blue..'' ^^^ other than you going off topic on a few occassions, pretty solid battle, with a creative scheme behind it, just not enuff ta get the win... Golden: nice peice, solid drop, consistancy throught, stayed on topic, creativity an imagination of the topic was edvident in lines such as: No money, no women, no restrictions on any time, No rhymes, no crimes, and decisions no longer ruin great finds. ^^^ had a nice flow ta the peice when you read it....vocab was good from both, more consistancy an better scheme an meaning ta the peice gets golden my vote... Lay-Yext, step your topic game up, creativity was good, but you gotta word an peice it together correctly, having good imagination will not get you far in topics unless you can use your ideas correctly...an you cant. Vote disqualified for suspected d/r. Crew vote removed |
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