new to the Rv i need some rep help a nigga out
 

yaw niggas think you smart
i'll leave you like john q and need a chage of heart
i part from the haven
to never be layen dead
two to your head
as your sheets run red
you herd what i said.
i leave you coked like tony montana on his death bed.
like a pencil ill leave it suspensfull with lead
you like a broke book hard to be read.
i think you have a brain tumor inlodged in your head.
i don't need a computer to break your neck like lex lugar.
you so damn ugly you even scared freddy crugar
i eat your guts like a cooger.
you ain't a winner nigga you just a loser
i seen better lines from a nigga wit terrets
i'll have your ass shakin like a vietnam vet
you bet im shiesty all yo nigga's can't fright me.
i'll be the next to bust you off nicely.
the best i just might be.
for bein 16 teen my flows are kinda tight g.
yaw niggas soft like muffins.
talkin so much shit yaw must be bluffin.
be like r kelly yo daughter im cuffin n fuckin bustin and duckin knockin and ruffin cuttin and stuffin yaw niggas like a chicken yaw betta start cluckin.

lmfao...first off, ya structure is ass-faced homie...dis maybe ya first OM drop but damn man...dont type how u want...i cant really help u wit explainin shit but i can tell u dat i only read tha first 2 bars and got mad...elevate then come back to OM...matter of fact...i'll upp dis for u so sumbody can come in here and tell u sumthin betta than me...stay up tho fam...1

-DB

this drop was better than the 1st i read but the same thing man keep writn and improvin and gettin better its gon really pay off

thanx yeah i will keep practicing and trying to do better