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Encaged in Pages
Coming to rest on sheets is my stress relieved
Context conceived when my fingers stretch to keys Disconnecting me from the normal day you see a white cell with blue bars encaging me Enraging the beast that became of He Insane mc screaming out the page at thee Yes see, that he that is chained is me Trapped in a storm of sentences that rains in ink Then drains in sinks of tubs leaving paper rings With flow that’s thought quenching, hope u take a drink What makes you think that this is a tasteful read You could never write if you’re afraid to bleed This is the essence of me. What compels it to be. The heart of “Ger” but 1st S-O-L to the D (soldger=soldier) The more that you read you’ll notice the focus in me The goals that I’ve reached and others that I hope to achieve Soon you will see the destiny I’m choosing for me My mind is a ocean the verse is a boat in the sea Every word that you read gets me closer to free My success is oxygen…Its supposed to be breathed link http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=186885 |
good drop homie nice flow nice vocab wordplay structure dope drop man
9/10 keep it up dogg ull be a dope text head werd |
i like this drop i felt the rhyme skeem and all...keep droppin like this and you'll chop heads..if you want to do a colabo just hit me and check my verse "lil huh?"
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thanx fam
upp for more feed |
this was tight man....liking the flow, and the not-overusing vocab, haha, i think you put your ideas together very well on this........you are a talented writer.......here is my fav lines
What makes you think that this is a tasteful read You could never write if you’re afraid to bleed Soon you will see the destiny I’m choosing for me My mind is a ocean the verse is a boat in the sea word, keep up yo....and can you RTF, thanks, if not.....whatever |
thanx fam..uppin
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Some man I was feeling this verse, decent flow but could have been
a bit more complex but it was good. Nice emotion and hott Vocab... All round Very decent verse I liked the closing bar dopeness... Stay up 1~ |
no doubt. thanx
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Yo The flow of your verse is aiight. Words and the expressions was good, you had good imaginary, upp your emotion though. Words are creative. I say this a good drop. My fav lines is............... The more that you read you’ll notice the focus in me The goals that I’ve reached and others that I hope to achieve Soon you will see the destiny I’m choosing for me My mind is a ocean the verse is a boat in the sea Every word that you read gets me closer to free My success is oxygen…Its supposed to be breathed Upp your vocab. Keep it up fam. |
ayo good shit man...i was feelin da flow, wordplay, rhyme scheme, vocab, and da structure was tight as hell...i was feelin dis line
The heart of “Ger” but 1st S-O-L to the D The more that you read you’ll notice the focus in me The goals that I’ve reached and others that I hope to achieve Soon you will see the destiny I’m choosing for me 9.5/10......stay up |
the closing bar is ill..................if u do poetry get at me on AIm=Acuity2k5 ...lets collab :thumbup:
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Wow...dope shit from the beginning to the end...Really good job man...Loved the rhyme scheme and the multies...Did a good job speaking your mind...In my opinion, this was damn-near perfect I loved it...9.5/10 man stay up...1
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i'm loving the feed back... if yall like this yall gon love my next couple of joints
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uppin this i'll drop sum new shit soon
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Hey dawg return the favor and hit up the battles in my sig...
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