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BkBrawla vs PreZidict
Battle Rules: 10-lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 30 minutes to check in 60 minutes to drop verse G-luck :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 04-19-05 at 08:59 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
PreZidict has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-19-05 08:45 PM.
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BkBrawla has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-19-05 08:48 PM.
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switch styles...listen fam
BK a loser..bitches "throw his facial" like "pitchin cosmetics" he gets dumber n dumber..if i spit "logic" he still couldnt get it each rap is pathetic, so he hides his record cuz he regrets it! brawla must suck "cock thru ass" cuz dis "crack-head-is-shit!" count bills? u illiterate, so u "stick 2 checks" like "elmer nikes"* i seldom type, while BK "stroke pens" til da inks 2 "hard 2 write" dis loser might, think he "pippen on text" but i'm "jordan on mics" u'd lose ina fight, he got a "sex change"..but still dis "mans-a-dike i damage kids, u da opposite u hand em rings n ask 4 wack blows nickname u "micheal jackson"..y? u "nuts" dats y we call u "jack-o"* *elmer is a glue brand *in da newspapers dey always callin micheal jackson "wacko jacko" but i'm sayin i call him jacko cuz he stay jackin off...get it |
Kid your punches are more like your hair due getting "fade"(d)* Even though you got an "earing" don't mean your punches is wicked* Kid never be extreme, couldn't spit nice if he waxed his tongue clean Even if you sucked the devils blood, still you wouldnt be pack with s.t.d's (disease) This fool couldnt come up with dope "jokes" if he had adam sandler ghost write for him Kid your gay, i bet you tha q asked you "what you looked like>?" instead of a pic you had it filmed Kid i know what's your favorite fruits are, them big apples you like to suck on * Your punches are so aimless, matter of fact your more "less" than a dumb blond Your punches are mix with blonde and brunettes, they have mental block (get it) You wearing a white tee, you not reppin for the hoods, you reppin for the cream from your mens cock *Look at his sig, he got on a white tee, got earings on, his hair is faded. |
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chea good verse homie................vote up niggas
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This was feedback posted for BkBrawla
i think you would be a lot better if like instead of trying to come up with funny ass punches like worry about the ends of ur lines rhyming....like thats one of the biggest things people look for in a battle...that it rhymes..once u get that down then you re-word your verses to rhyme and flow together.....you come up with some creative stuff if you would just get dat rhyming part down you would potentially be D-O-P-E......thats my fee bruh
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Aiiiiiiiiiight, uppin for some votes...............
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This was feedback posted for BkBrawla
checkin the polls in here..
good drop prezidict you too bkbrawala |
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chea good looks konflictz......vote up on dis battle niggas
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Voted For: BkBrawla
aiight lemme break shit down..... BK: Ya verse was aiight but... yu need to even ya lines out a bit more, even if they are stretched if they are all the same or close to the same it will be easier to keep track of the flow. and try to make sure your lines ryhme if u are going to use a AA-BB format. cuz that will fuck up the bar all together. also try to incorporate a more complex rhyme scheme. throw sum internal rhymes and multis in there... work on ya wording as well. u had sum good concepts that could've been great punches. work on ya nameplays/personals. i didnt see any nameplays but they definately couldve been used. and the personals that i saw werent that hard.... i think thats it Prez:u had sum decent punches. but sum played concepts as well. u know how to structure a punch but just havent showed a lot of creativity. work on that. think outside the box. u could use a more complex rhyme scheme as well. also up your vocab. u dont need to use huge words or nothin, just get out of the elementary zone. ya metas coud use sum work as well as ya personals. not sure if u used any I couldnt tell. not much else. if u want to work on ya skills hit me up on aim and i'll help ya out Vote removed |
damn i didnt mean to drop a vote. i was just tryna leave feedback. get a mod to fix that..
sorry guys |
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