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as flows collide
We decided to test out what too different flows would collab like
Murdz drops first MURDZ- In the world of punchlines, I was the first to throw a chop at the wrist Unregisterd pivots outward and blocks the hit, I respond with a kick The spectrum of my abilities is like no other, twice the times of color I throw stones that go through the lining of hummers, I've got the lines mimes mummer You want to fuck this sick teen, I beg any and all faggots please diss me Throw it back to 87, eat your sugary verse, and call it a sweet sixteen You don't even get to play the fence, I'll leave you dead on the gate You're so gassed up, if you contacted warm air you'd condenstate I was never a novice, that's why to the biters, it's Murdz to watch If I took my illest verse and ran with it, it'd leave your memory jogged Fucking biters, you don't rap enough to suck, you're hardly fags If you bit verses amongst eachother, you'd just be lollying gags Without good offense, don't start getting defensive Murdz is precise, I purposely miss the perforated line by ten inches I'll seperate your upper and lower body like senate and representatives Twenty minutes, that's twelve hundred seconds, thirty give or take You could pull your head out of your ass, and still stay spitting waste Just repeat my name two or so times, in a mirrored room with no lights My two styles of punch don't move backwards, but nigga they both rights UNREGISTERED- All yall RV gankstuhs can get fuckt Cause I’m the ON original net thug I step yo the mic to wreak havoc And rap faster than a speed addict My lyrics rarely disrespect women Due to the fact that I wana get with em Muafucka don’t even be smirken at me I’ll make you underground rapper permanently Mc’s sayin “I aint shit” I know I’m not shit Battling’ me within 5 bars you will have got ripped I quit smoking but still spit dopely Claiming your grimy but all you do is bitch homie Stay sick with the mics until the world ends I had to get that shit off my chest like Rkellys girl freinds |
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This was really tight yall got it mutherfucking locked lol@tha undergrownd rapper bit
9/10 |
Flow was rugged very original
had some nice wordplay that twisted my thinking cap much respect |
Apreciate the feedback.. Upping for yall muafuckas to look at.
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thanks.. uppin....
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You want to fuck this sick teen, I beg any and all faggots please diss me
Throw it back to 87, eat your sugary verse, and call it a sweet sixteen that was had me laughin shit was preety good asnd hood word i can see this in audio word keep doing ya thing |
Stay sick with the mics until the world ends
I had to get that shit off my chest like Rkellys girl frein yea the ending was aight but u could of did a little better but it wasnt bad it flowed and kinda gangsta keep doing ya thing |
not bad not bad at all
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^was it good at all?
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upppiiinnn this ish
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uping for feed back
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Hmm.. This was an iight peice...
Structure was good , You had some nice Wordplay , pretty decent vocab from murdz.. Nice topic, both really had the concept good.. Unregistered, you really need to elevate on your structure and use more emotions , and feeling... try to use more poetic words to try and make imagery..and make the reader want to read more and more... |
What am I suposed to put emotion into a verse thats just punches. yeah I know my structures shitty I cant seem to get it right I geuss it'll come with practice. Thnx for the feed back
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