MaRVJay1009 vs hotshh!
 

Battle Rules:

12 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 600

Check in by: 04-26-05 at 01:35 PM

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hotshh! has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-25-05 01:36 PM.

All my votes are Liable.......cause you be snitching for Survival
Marv dropped so many dimes, he got a bank account with 5-0
So of course marv J "runshit"....... he too broke for a Whip!!
Da last time u hopped on anything dat move, was Strobe Dick
Ha! Im starving to play, cuz on da ball court u are what u Say
Ya shots miss on the net, Ive always owned a 'Marvolous JAy'
I done whored em in multi's, but marv smoke weed, i can Tell
Cause he came back for seconds..... and left with another "L"
U need 2 eave son, no beast on the beat, we dont Believe em
U only visit "trackmasters" when ya girl gets her Weave done
So say hello to Defeat......... and kiss goodbye your Streak
Nightmares? HA!....... america reads ya shit to fall Asleep
(silly internet geeks!!)

5th bar supposed to go
U need 2 Leave son, no beast on the beat, we dont Believe em
U only visit "trackmasters" when ya girl gets her Weave done

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-26-05 12:05 AM.

dont play with da animal!....

im 2 sick,and u bitch!..i just got a new 5th so fam a few clips.
a hit a head n leave u like da "yankee's when babe died","roof-less".*ruth*
type of guns i hold make kops-get-scared,chill! ya not-sick-quer.
he raps like "nelly" ppl came da see marv spit no1 cares if "HOT in here"*
no1 stopin dis bastard!,u lyin 2 ppl on rv hot ur an actress go hop in a casket.
u wouldn't have a "buzz in da hood" if u put ya "intercom on da top of ya jacket".
dis fagget lie's!...talkin bout in da bronx he shoot his gun & be stabin guy's.
put jay in ya PaRa-graph PaRa-medics gon tell ya moms her boy's PaRa-lized.
vets think ur still a noob who wants dis dick in a crew,he does alot of bickerin 2.
u spit with da flu?,no u "da medicine man" well i know "women sicker" than u.
couldn't "see marv" on his "bp page",im cool u dont wanna c-me-rage.
u'll neva get on da radio usin ya "demo as a frisby" a be da only time ya "Cd-plays"

*get it nelly was "hot in herr"..and i mean hot in herr by hot shh in dis battle thread

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Marvjay1009:

im 2 sick,and u bitch!..i just got a new 5th so fam a few clips.
a hit a head n leave u like da "yankee's when babe died","roof-less".*ruth*
^^oo nice meta and multies 8/10
type of guns i hold make kops-get-scared,chill! ya not-sick-quer.
he raps like "nelly" ppl came da see marv spit no1 cares if "HOT in here"*
^^another dope meta 8/10
no1 stopin dis bastard!,u lyin 2 ppl on rv hot ur an actress go hop in a casket.
u wouldn't have a "buzz in da hood" if u put ya "intercom on da top of ya jacket".
^^decent bar 6/10
dis fagget lie's!...talkin bout in da bronx he shoot his gun & be stabin guy's.
put jay in ya PaRa-graph PaRa-medics gon tell ya moms her boy's PaRa-lized.
^^decent 5/10
vets think ur still a noob who wants dis dick in a crew,he does alot of bickerin 2.
u spit with da flu?,no u "da medicine man" well i know "women sicker" than u.
^^decent 5/10
couldn't "see marv" on his "bp page",im cool u dont wanna c-me-rage.
u'll neva get on da radio usin ya "demo as a frisby" a be da only time ya "Cd-plays"
^^good closer 7/10

Overall: 39/60 (65%)

Hotshh!:

All my votes are Liable.......cause you be snitching for Survival
Marv dropped so many dimes, he got a bank account with 5-0
^^lol nice bar 7/10
So of course marv J "runshit"....... he too broke for a Whip!!
Da last time u hopped on anything dat move, was Strobe Dick
^^wow that was wack 2/10
Ha! Im starving to play, cuz on da ball court u are what u Say
Ya shots miss on the net, Ive always owned a 'Marvolous JAy'
^^nice meta 7/10
I done whored em in multi's, but marv smoke weed, i can Tell
Cause he came back for seconds..... and left with another "L"
^^L lines are played but this was ok 7/10
U need 2 eave son, no beast on the beat, we dont Believe em
U only visit "trackmasters" when ya girl gets her Weave done
^^ooh lol 7/10
So say hello to Defeat......... and kiss goodbye your Streak
Nightmares? HA!....... america reads ya shit to fall Asleep
^^decent personal and closer could have been better 7/10

Overall: 37/60 (62%)

Vote: MarvJay1009

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Voted For: hotshh!

wow, this was not really a best two in the site battle. It was one of the best against a nigga that could get up there, but ain't there yet.

Hotsshhh ripped this shit, and i will explain why.

Punches: No contest hear. Hottsshhh: very well structured, witty, and just nice.
Mav: Tried to, had nice concepts really, but i dunno, i've seen a few of your battles and you seem to just not word your punches good at all. This was another case of that.

Personals: Hottsshh cause they were worded better.

Flow: Hotshh. Read both of them like you rappin' it, his flows a lot better, and Marvs' sicker/hot in here bar like fucked the whole flow up for me really tryin' to figure out how it rhymed for a few mins.

Overall enjoyment: hotsh: Just nice, crisp, well-delivered lines.

Fav Bars:

Hotshh: So say hello to Defeat......... and kiss goodbye your Streak
Nightmares? HA!....... america reads ya shit to fall Asleep

Bar was fuckin' wild nice man.

MarvJay:

no1 stopin dis bastard!,u lyin 2 ppl on rv hot ur an actress go hop in a casket.
u wouldn't have a "buzz in da hood" if u put ya "intercom on da top of ya jacket".

Just the second part of the bar though, the first part was like filler to me.

Least favorite:

Hotshh:
Ha! Im starving to play, cuz on da ball court u are what u Say
Ya shots miss on the net, Ive always owned a 'Marvolous JAy'

I just didn't like it

MarvJay:
type of guns i hold make kops-get-scared,chill! ya not-sick-quer.
he raps like "nelly" ppl came da see marv spit no1 cares if "HOT in here"*

decent concept, worded sloppily, and didn't flow or rhyme.

Basically, you can see why hotshh won that shit. Marv is gonna be really good i think, but i think you need to wrok on wordin' your punches a lil' better. Nice job both of y'all though.

If either of y'all wanna hit me wit an honest vote (translation: Vote for the actual person who was nicer, not who asked you to vote) I be doin' audio now, have one open vs. Ecko under the name Billy Shakes. Hollatchaboiboi.

-CJ-

This was feedback posted for hotshh!
 

yo yall both mah niggaz i aint votin both dem shitz was funni as hell on da real

This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

good battle marv..... i think u killed him.... hotshh was alil choppy with this one and seemed alil forced in some parts....

yo, im getting flow's vote removed marv
i forgot to black list him, i knew he was goingto vote on this for you
he always does.......soooooo no complaining but his vote is gone,

This was feedback posted for hotshh!
 

checkin them polllss to close of a battle for me to vote on

good battle

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

hotshh!
All my votes are Liable.......cause you be snitching for Survival
Marv dropped so many dimes, he got a bank account with 5-0
So of course marv J "runshit"....... he too broke for a Whip!!
Da last time u hopped on anything dat move, was Strobe Dick
Ha! Im starving to play, cuz on da ball court u are what u Say
Ya shots miss on the net, Ive always owned a 'Marvolous JAy'

U need 2 eave son, no beast on the beat, we dont Believe em
U only visit "trackmasters" when ya girl gets her Weave done

vs.

marv's
type of guns i hold make kops-get-scared,chill! ya not-sick-quer.
he raps like "nelly" ppl came da see marv spit no1 cares if "HOT in here"*
no1 stopin dis bastard!,u lyin 2 ppl on rv hot ur an actress go hop in a casket.
u wouldn't have a "buzz in da hood" if u put ya "intercom on da top of ya jacket".
vets think ur still a noob who wants dis dick in a crew,he does alot of bickerin 2.
u spit with da flu?,no u "da medicine man" well i know "women sicker" than u.
couldn't "see marv" on his "bp page",im cool u dont wanna c-me-rage.
u'll neva get on da radio usin ya "demo as a frisby" a be da only time ya "Cd-plays"

I was feeling hotshh's opener more than marv j's, but marv j's closer was more creative than hotshh!(i seen that sleep line before in sum females battle on here). Both y'all had mad personals.. the sickest line was the buzz in the hood (intercom on da top of ya jacket) lol the best personal by far is da medicine line and Nelly reference, for hotshh the best was the basketball line and the "trackmasters" line lol.. Both y'all bashed each other hard. But since i gotta vote i'd say marv j, he brought the heat to you hotshh! his personals were a bit more creative in my opinion...

v/ marv j Nice battle kids.

Voted For: hotshh!

All my votes are Liable.......cause you be snitching for Survival
Marv dropped so many dimes, he got a bank account with 5-0
This was a good opener. Nice personal.

So of course marv J "runshit"....... he too broke for a Whip!!
Da last time u hopped on anything dat move, was Strobe Dick
Kinda played, but nicely worded. Good punch

Ha! Im starving to play, cuz on da ball court u are what u Say
Ya shots miss on the net, Ive always owned a 'Marvolous JAy'
Nice play off his name. Nice punch, this bar made a lot of since

I done whored em in multi's, but marv smoke weed, i can Tell
Cause he came back for seconds..... and left with another "L"
Not that hard hitting, but it came at the right time. Nice punch

U need 2 eave son, no beast on the beat, we dont Believe em
U only visit "trackmasters" when ya girl gets her Weave done
LOL. Funny line. Good wordplay, and a good punch

So say hello to Defeat......... and kiss goodbye your Streak
Nightmares? HA!....... america reads ya shit to fall Asleep
(silly internet geeks!!)
An ok closer, could’ve been better, but still nice

You came hard with punches and creativeness in this verse. I was feeling it. Kinda funnt in a lot of places, and hard hitting bars and wordplay. I think you structure and flow was on point here.



im 2 sick,and u bitch!..i just got a new 5th so fam a few clips.
a hit a head n leave u like da "yankee's when babe died","roof-less".*ruth*
Nice wordplay. Kinda stretched line here, but still hard hitting

type of guns i hold make kops-get-scared,chill! ya not-sick-quer.
he raps like "nelly" ppl came da see marv spit no1 cares if "HOT in here"*
U left a few words out in this one, lol, but I still understood it. Nice wordplay

no1 stopin dis bastard!,u lyin 2 ppl on rv hot ur an actress go hop in a casket.
u wouldn't have a "buzz in da hood" if u put ya "intercom on da top of ya jacket".
Not that hard hitting. I think you tried too hard here

dis fagget lie's!...talkin bout in da bronx he shoot his gun & be stabin guy's.
put jay in ya PaRa-graph PaRa-medics gon tell ya moms her boy's PaRa-lized.
Syllables were stretched out here, making ur structure a lil off as well as your flow. Nice wordplay though

vets think ur still a noob who wants dis dick in a crew,he does alot of bickerin 2.
u spit with da flu?,no u "da medicine man" well i know "women sicker" than u.
I think this is you hardest bar so far. This was dope. I was feeling this one

couldn't "see marv" on his "bp page",im cool u dont wanna c-me-rage.
u'll neva get on da radio usin ya "demo as a frisby" a be da only time ya "Cd-plays"
Good closer, I was feeling this

Seen a lot of good wordplay in this one. Nice hard hitting punches. It’s just your structure was a lil stretched which took your gflow off. But all over this was a nice verse. I was feeling it.

I think I’ma give this one up to hot. No hat to marv, this was a dope battle, I was just feeling hot verse more. I think he came a lil harder with punches in this one, and creativeness, and his structure/flow was more on point. My vote goes to marv. RTF in bottom link of sig.


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Voted For: hotshh!

MarvJay1009:

Punches: 8/10

Personals: 6/10

Wordplay: 8/10

Flow: 5/10

Structure: 5/10

Overall: 32/50=64%

Pretty good verse from you...not the best that I've seen from you but it was good. I felt your structure was kinda fucked because a couple lines were stretched which messed up the flow. Punches and wordplay were pretty hot, but could've hit a little harder by your standards...

Hotshhh:

Punches: 8/10

Personals: 7/10

Wordplay: 8/10

Flow: 9/10

Structure: 9/10

Overall: 41/50=82%

This verse was pretty hot man...Feeling the punches, and I felt that they hit a little harder than his, plus you added more personals that hit, when most of his could've been directed towards anybody...Your structure was almost perfect, so your flow was too...Great closer as well...

No hate, just my honest opinion...RTF and hit up my battle vs Kesse in my sig...Thanx...1

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