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50Cal. 04-26-05 11:07 PM

elementality vs lyrical prodigy
 
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TOPIC=WINDS MESSAGE

Lyrical Prodigy 04-27-05 01:33 AM

checkin in.....

Elementality 04-27-05 01:47 PM

I dont even know why im bothering with this shit, seems kinda fruitless after what happened last round.
EVERYTHING HAS BEEN FIXED STOP CRYING LIKE A BITCH

Lyrical Prodigy 04-29-05 03:25 AM

As I wake up in the morning and get the paper for the news
I smell the sweet morning air and see the sappy mildew
I let my dog out so he can handle his biz
As the streets start to fill wit cars and lil kids
The sun shines bright and it looks to be a beautiful day
I have not a care in the world about what the news has to say
All of a sudden a wind blows and sends a chill down my spine
And I begin to reminisce of a happy and sublime time
For in this wind I heard a distant, faint but yet and still familiar voice
Which brough back emotions as strong as the engine in a Rolls-Royce
I fathomed the depths of my memory to figure out who had whispered
Then felt complete and utter disbelief as the thought struck and I remembered
How could I forget the love and companionship we once shared
You were always there for me when no one was around to give a care
I was struck by pain with memory to our unhappy fallout and split
Cuz without you I thought I couldn't deal with life and its bullshit
I telepathically asked God to relieve me of this pain
And in His great mercy He made the wind blow again
This time was different cuz instead of past I saw present day
I'm happy we're back together even though you live far away
With you by my side I feel like Superman cuz I'm invincible
No longer do I have to worry about pain or my heart being divisible
By any odd number, or an even one for that matter
Because of you, thoughts of loneliness and failure have scattered
Grasciously the Lord made the wind blow one final gust
Where I saw the future, and our love hadn't turned to lust
To make a long story short, our future looked bright
I thanked the Lord almighty for this blessing and wonderful insight
As I came back to my lawn with paper in hand, I was shocked and amazed
At the effexts of a gentle breeze, and how it could throw you in a daze

Elementality 04-29-05 10:24 AM

The Wind's Message


I'm Tired of counting bodies
in this melo-drama soap set
Amnesiac infants that are
ripe just for the training
of this quicksand seduction

The sea is parted from the
endless corruption of fault
Those affectionate hands of
the anti-christ leading the
way to this inevitable verdict

The opposition can't feel
the tenticle suction cup
over their mouth that takes
the weight out of the living
Ask the vagabonds who bare
witness to this everyday,
tripping over endless proof

Yet this clock keeps ticking
The hypodermic living keep
kicking, and keep choking
Time portals are breached
by the open-minded, while
ignorant sheep are left
behind to be branded by the
protoculture - null and void

The incentive of our essence
limps with the cane of despair
The sedated robbed earth's cause
Sickened with thirst they suck
it dry, and he can't help but
to give in to catatonic leisure

This hex was delivered by the
orchestra of fate, synthesized
into the epidemic of gaia
this fever bliss into anxiety

You're bitten upon the entrance.


*If you didnt know, wind is the narrator.

Spektikul 04-29-05 01:44 PM

Honestly Prodigys script looks like a topical.

Topic = All About My Day.

lol.

Elementalitys script if deep as fuck.

Plus dope structuring.

V/Elementality..................................

but I aint in the league, just leavin some feed tho.

Peez.

Acuity 04-29-05 03:23 PM

Lyrical Prodigy's drop did come across as more of a topical drop, however it was still nice 4 what it was, either way it didnt compare to the complexity prsented by elemantility..id say there was sum absolutely mind bogglin shit in this drop, which would take like 5mins 2 explain, gr8 imagery and description and the stanza form fitted n worked well...

Vote-Elemantality

Acuity 05-05-05 01:31 PM

Elemantality Wins - 2-0

AC & Elem


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