the eternity before u sleep.....
 

(jus a quick poem, came into my head when i was tired lol)


Troubled, troubled mind, Can't find sleep no more
I think I've jus defined...what my problems in life r for
Contemplating vivid images and dreams............
powerful, rigorous-enough 2 bring u 2 ur knees.
Innovative, motivative....but most of 'em r sad
liftin us, elevatin 2 the things we neva had....
All I ever wanted....was 2 feel complete........
but the missing piece is more obvious as
I lay upon these sheets........
The room is dark yet shadows dance around me
I am all alone but i feel a presence surround me
Whatever could it be? I try hard not to think..
Intensifying, keep eyes open, even tryin not to blink.
I try to keep My mind blank but soon I start to sink...
"Take the sandman's hand, fall deeper into me......
I am the power that only u can see or feel....
I shall take u with me, into the land of dreams............."

uppin the feedback please! dont be too brutal! lol :)

i wuz feelin dat...nice emotion n imagery. if i had ta find one thing wrong wit it then it would i would have ta say up ur vocab. but it wuz nice. i can see u got talent n skillz so keep writtin cuz im lookin 4ward to seein more of ur stuff on here

yee-o! thanx for dat!

uppin.....

uuuppppppppppiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnn...............