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Last Moments...
Last Moments of Life
"Special News Bulletin: We have just been informed of a robbery at a local coveneince store. Police say the suspect is a larger man, wearing an army-style trenchcoat, and is still at large. Police also have reason to believe he is armed, and should be considered very dangerous...." (talking)....*snooze*, i finally roll over and shut off my alarm booze and cigarettes all over....shit, i can barely lift my arms finally get up, its noon, holy fuck, such a pounding headache covered in dirt, whole body hurts, cold shower and still not awake no clean shirts, my appartment smells and looks like shit body aint fit, but i learned a long time ago to live like this get drunk everynight, waste away, smoke and vomit is my new scent it keeps me content, whatever, i still find a way to pay the rent and its friday, i get paid, gotta go down to store get some things screw what the say, whiskey and mcdonalds is my breakfast of kings dropped outta school, i can always go back, im working two jobs thought itd be cool, to do everything on my own, live like a slob exit my building, air is filling, the store is only a few blocks got past the first, but then a force pulling on my arm had me stopped it was some old man, said give me your cash, and grabbed me by the throat ive beat many guys asses, whats another crazy guy in a trench coat gave him two hard hits to the ribs, then said.. cmon, put up your dukes he pulled out a gun, said, your life is done....and then began to shoot i was through, i lay on the cement, my cheap life spent...it quickly flashes my life had no meaning, forgotten forever as soon as the day passes... during your time, live everything you can to its fullest and try avoiding all strife because you never know when you'll have your last moments of life http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=187839 |
wow, hot shit kesse. the beginning 12 were fire,
and the last 8 were plasma cat, for real...thats the only way i can describe this verse. real good drop my son. next time dont jump, should have asked me for a collab...thought we were partners, its all good. just hit me next time for the collab. good shit, i feel you. what gave you the inspiration to jot this down? let me know. peace cat. |
It's because I got fuckin' shot by some dude in a trench coat...fuckin' bastards... trying to steal my money....
Good drop Kesse, enjoyed it...I'm up at 7:18....:(....my breakfast of champions is saying...wake up and lets go to McDonalds..:thumbup: But on the real...nice drop...good flow, good storyline....hope you weren't picturing me in the future...the whiskey and McDonalds made me laugh my ass off...that was dope shit... Red Bull & Ebert Give It :thumbup::thumbup:....late... |
haha, i wrote it for a battle on another site, and everybody said it lost because none of them actually wrote topicals, haha, so i decided to post this on here to see what people thought
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lol^
nice drop here, flowed reasonably well and had some dope lines which most people can relate too finally get up, its noon, holy fuck, such a pounding headache covered in dirt, whole body hurts, cold shower and still not awake second verse flowed well and i could see that in audio lookin good. nice drop 7/10 please rtf either honest vote or on my OM in this forum :thumbup: |
wurrrrrrd......
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Yo dis shit was straight fire homie liked da hole thing flowed good alright structure stayed on da topic all through da verse and dats always good homie......i give it a 8.5/10.......~1~
RTF Please heres da link..... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188404 |
word, i actually wrote this, on april 7th, before i went to motley crue :), haha....so my flow is kinda choppy....its cool to see how much i've progressed though, thanks-fo-feed e-body
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This was a nice piece. Creative topic fasho. The flow was good for the most part, choppy in areas. Multis were good and used at right points. Vocab was basic but it doesnt matter much. You stayed on topic, never rambled off. Some nice imagery but not much of it. So keep working at using deep words for imagery. But in a piece like this that is tough to do. Anyways cool drop man.
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yep............
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