**Victimisation**
 

Woke up in a cold sweat, my mind full of regret
Head pounding, questioning why I feel so upset
My feet tied, I struggle but I can’t get them loose
So bruised, wondering if I been a victim of abuse

Explore my surroundings, situation dumbfounding
The loud music next door now so sweet sounding
Where am I? Open my mouth but I can’t scream
Eyes heavy, realize he’s taken this to the extreme

Opportunities came I missed them, what a shame
Coz from then on, me as his property he’d proclaim
And I blame myself, coz everything was my fault
My lips sealed shut I forgot about the first assault

Voices interrupt my thoughts, my body turns tense
I close my eyes, might think I’m dead, my defense
Grip so intense, then gently puts me to the ground
My tomb already laid, insures, I’ll never be found

A day past no more, I knew that from the sunlight
A pilot of my own plane, now the end of this flight
Feel so weak, my hands raised like I’m being lifted
My worries all gone, into everlasting sleep I drifted

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uppin ya'll...................

Waddup Mizz Fyre...this DBW....anyway. This was a real deep piece...prolly one of the best ones I've seen, I felt the emotion in it, vocab always on point, flow as well and the story was actually touching,especiall the end....keep droppin fam.


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whats hood fam?...my first time readin sumthin by u...nice deep dopeness right here...i gotta keep a eye out for yo drops...props 9/10...peep my OMz too...links in sig

-DB

tight ass ish

check out my freestyle drop

^^^thanx ya'll uppin fore more feed..........

good stuff mizz
nice flow an vocab, structure cant be faulted, sent a message thru rhymes, thats always a good thing, ya just floatin your creative talent like always, deep stuff 8/10

keep 'em droppin babygirl

I like this piece right here, structure was nice, flow was cool, creative as always...kept me in suspense

overall 9/10

Return tha favor

aight check it

i see all these people givin ya near perfect scores cuz ya know they suckin up to ya!!!!

structure - can't fault ya on this, it was perfect lines were not stretched and every one was kept together.
flow - flow was on point, perfect structure grants you a decent flow all the way through.........
topic - the idea for ya open mic was nice, ya delivered a message through ya rhymes like teph said and ya didn't fall off at all, ya stayed with it all the way.
vocab - the vocab was nice, a couple of parts where it was real decent but some points where it seemed rather basic to me...so ya cud work on that.

overall i think it was a tight drop - 7/10

this was like woua! pretty pretty dope,nice structure,very nice vocab
great OM

^^^thanx alot ya'll.........much appreciated