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.Judicial. 05-03-05 10:04 AM

Judicial vs Tephlon
 
Battle Rules:

6 - LINES
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


Two Respectable Heads Going at it in about 15 minutes...gonna be good

Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 05-03-05 at 10:34 AM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

System 05-03-05 10:06 AM

Judicial has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-03-05 10:06 AM.

.Judicial. 05-03-05 10:19 AM

i could sit u n a room labeled 1 and give u a hall pass
u can leave n comeback and still wouldnt be in the first class(1)

ima cause lyrical supression to this manz RV obsession(2)
give em a radar,he still aint detectin this subliminal message

This kid is seriously wack for his amount of RV experience
he bitches more than girls on they monthly menstrals...period..(3)

Explanations.....

(1)..The Name of his crews tryout thread is First Class
(2)..He was bragging about when he gets 6000 posts strobe told him he can do anything on the site he wants.
(3)..If you know Tephlon you know he bitches and complains bout fuckin everything...
-If you dont understand dont vote
Drop a link for a returned voted---Honest

System 05-03-05 10:28 AM

Tephlon has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-03-05 10:28 AM.

Dirty Nigga 05-03-05 10:35 AM

Judicial? the jury? hahah, CHECK IT..........

Mistah A Got u to battle?
.........................,,,,,,.your runnin a pussy ass crew
just ask Mizz Fyre.........even she's ashamed of you!!!!
i rest my case in 2 lines, so i'll just waste these next four
cause the only ''hot text'' u ever have is cyberin your whore!
callin yourself a respectable head?...
......................................please tell me that aint a fact??
i got approched by this whack, because opposites attract!
..........................................

Mizz Fyre = Left The Jury Cause They Was Pussy lol
His whore = DQ (His RV Wifey lol)

Murdah.txt 05-03-05 01:24 PM

Voted For: Judicial

alrie good battle short but ight judicial......
punches goodand on target.....flow good i could follow easy..
personalz...on target hit directly......i liked tha last line best good hit homie
alrite tephlon...flow was ok structure was aight punches hit a lil bit...but u went to soft like u thought you had it no prob so u stoped tryin which gave judicial this win easily.....
next post ill leave a link for my crew battle against slobk
thanx yall

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

Murdah.txt 05-03-05 01:27 PM

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HIT THIS ITS GETTIN MAD SLEPT ON THANX

Verbal 05-03-05 01:40 PM

Voted For: Tephlon

Mistah A Got u to battle?
.........................,,,,,,.your runnin a pussy ass crew
just ask Mizz Fyre.........even she's ashamed of you!!!!
OK personal.......isn't Fyre in your clique?
i rest my case in 2 lines, so i'll just waste these next four
cause the only ''hot text'' u ever have is cyberin your whore!
OK...
callin yourself a respectable head?...
......................................please tell me that aint a fact??
i got approched by this whack, because opposites attract!
OK closer...

could sit u n a room labeled 1 and give u a hall pass
u can leave n comeback and still wouldnt be in the first class(1)
Set up was too elaborate for the punch..
ima cause lyrical supression to this manz RV obsession(2)
give em a radar,he still aint detectin this subliminal message
No...
This kid is seriously wack for his amount of RV experience
he bitches more than girls on they monthly menstrals...period..(3)
Played, but OK personal..

Teph- OK, nothing special...decent closer and opener...at least you rhymed..

Judicial- 2nd bar was filler....didn't rhyme...opener was too stretched out to be an effective punch, last bar was played, could have come up with better analogy than menstrual bitches..just in my opinion...just some work on the structure and some more original concepts needed..


Just my honest vote...RTF

Premanition 05-03-05 01:52 PM

This was feedback posted for Tephlon
 
checkin the polls, weak from both really here..............

.:Jack Rackam:. 05-03-05 02:45 PM

Voted For: Judicial

i could sit u n a room labeled 1 and give u a hall pass
u can leave n comeback and still wouldnt be in the first class(1)
^^good opener,1st ine partial filler but decent setup,
good personal and crew nameplay..lil simple..decent..6.5/10

ima cause lyrical supression to this manz RV obsession(2)
give em a radar,he still aint detectin this subliminal message
^^1st line couldve been way better,weak setup
get more complex with your setups fam...2nd line was a
decent concept but it wasnt delivered very good....5/10

This kid is seriously wack for his amount of RV experience
he bitches more than girls on they monthly menstrals...period..(3)

^^seemed forced, periods, kinda played in the way you used it, really wasnt liking the forced ryhme scheme in your bars..
with more inners or assonasance ryhmes it wouldve been much better man......5/10
.
16.5/30
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Mistah A Got u to battle?
.........................,,,,,,.your runnin a pussy ass crew
just ask Mizz Fyre.........even she's ashamed of you!!!!
^^weak setup,...ok punch, but its not very creative.6/10
very short lines, you couldve been much more complex.

i rest my case in 2 lines, so i'll just waste these next four
cause the only ''hot text'' u ever have is cyberin your whore!
^^this was koo,..good meta, decent setup, 6.5/10
only thing wrong with it is its not direct.....
callin yourself a respectable head?...
......................................please tell me that aint a fact??
i got approched by this whack, because opposites attract!
^^closer did it for me, good meta, goodsetup...
dont know why you feel you havta use all the periods
in your verse thou,.........
.overall, better creativity and overall better punches
.
return the favour in the sig.no hate

Vote switched

.:Jack Rackam:. 05-03-05 02:46 PM

i will get that fixed,...........damn votin system

.:Jack Rackam:. 05-03-05 02:48 PM

tephlons last bar gets a 7/10,which makes it 19.5/30..
good battle by both considering the time limits...
but tephlons punches were much more creative......pc...rtf

....Gone.... 05-03-05 04:07 PM

This was feedback posted for Judicial
 
Checking this shit out..............................And no i didnt get him to battle you. Anyway uppin.

.Judicial. 05-03-05 04:48 PM

uppin...prem u said we both came wack and we both spit in like 3-5 mins....not really wack in dat amount of time...but anyways uppin dis shit....

Dirty Nigga 05-03-05 05:02 PM

2-1 up, should be a close battle, we both came alright for the amount of time we had.........


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