short poem (favors will be returned)
 

i made this on MS Paint so that's why it looks a little shitty
favors will be returned

sup man...

nice presentation lol

for being such a short piece it was surprisingly dope...your vocab was excellent and conveyed that ur obviously smart and you used sparingly but in the right places..your images came through clearly and emotion was created well..i like the rehetorical question in the last line it worked well

my best line:
"Blind to the facts ungranted wishes"

Next time: lets c a longa drop, address a more original topic, keep em comin :thumbup:

RTF link in sig...me v Mad Dog..Peace

thanx i'm so proudo f that piece....lol definantly the favor will be returned....uppin

uppin cuz i'd really like feed on this more than my other poem

Well, I like this. Not only because its about Christ but because the lay-out. Like you added onto a backround. it grabbed me. Ima use your idea..
*pondering*

So yeah, God Bless YOU and keep em comin. Oh and it will be very much apprecated if you commented on Psst in my sig but if you have a few minutes my best poem ever is WHAT ask me why I am in TC. Long but worth it read.
Sweft

I liked this a lot, you said so much in such little space,but you used strong words and contemplative vocabulary, good topic and concept..1

tahnx man....uppin this shit if anyone still wants to give feed