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Daubs 05-08-05 03:59 PM

RIP LAUREN...deep and true.
 
Since she been gone, i struggle to find words for my feelings...
Lay in the middle of the road, no movement, sounds or breathing.

Who would have thought that this would be her last ever evening.
Losing friends and family with no notification of her leaving.

From all her friends, life isnt normal our emotions are flying..
We all pictured crazy shit, but never imagined our Lauren dying.

I could talk to you about anything, you would listen and never ever tell.
Thought earth represented heaven, but all of a sudden life seems more like hell.

Even theifs murderers and rapist walk free in this cruel inhabited world..
God works in mysterious ways?
Well they fucked up if he'd rather take the life from an innocent teenage girl.

Couldnt help but feel emotional when i walked past the crime scene..
Had so much to look forward to, but instead got served death at only 14.

Im not embarassed to say, even though its the first time in 5 years..
Dropped some flowers for respect, and couldnt help but shed my tears.

If we were down, you could always crack a joke and make us cheerful..
Never lost some one one as close, didnt know life could be this hurtful..

Kept away form drugs and shit, lived her life without a single regret..
Could put a smile on anyone, your someone nobody will ever forget......


Didnt care what people thought, you were a type of your own, nothing but unique..
If only you had looked up, checked for the red light, you wouldnt have to rest in peace.

RIP lauren, love you forever...

Bangalore 05-08-05 04:04 PM

this was emotion at its finest . mad props to you on this. pieces like this are what make what we do a art form. very very very nice

10/10 the emotion and simplicity of it all just takes it to another level

Non

Germ 05-08-05 04:11 PM

deep daubs, deep........sorry bout this man, but gotta stay strong ya hear

anyways, nice deep piece, emotion was jam-packed....not too shab imagery, but it wasn't needed since this was just pure emotion....good piece man, straight from the heart, and thats what its all about

keep up

Kawn Flixx 05-08-05 04:16 PM

Damn this was really deep ..Sorry to read what happened.
You had lots of emontions , good feelings going into this drop..
Nice vocab , and good structure.. you had lots of imagery..
The thing that made this peice very good , was all the
emotions you had in this piece.. everyone who reads this
peice will realize how much you loved her..and how
it surprised you when she died..stay up ,
and drop a link

E.C 05-08-05 04:21 PM

daubs.. this was the deepest shit i have ever read up to this date i think... your emotion nearly had me going, told you before im sorry to hear what happened but yeh u have to stay strong keep your head up man... 10/10 this was nicee....

Daubs 05-08-05 04:23 PM

thanks for feed everyone, its appreciated.

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2137915

Elegiac 05-08-05 04:34 PM

Sorry for your loss man, it was really really deep and made me tear man seriously. Good job.

13th. 05-08-05 04:36 PM

damn i cant say nemore jus 10/10.......................RIP Lauren.......

Murdah.txt 05-08-05 04:43 PM

word deep drop homie sorry bout yo loss and every one else who was close to her good drop homie madd respect R.I.P LAUREN may angels guide u too tha gatez.....

Ecko-D 05-08-05 05:28 PM

Very deep n i could feel the emotion..
Cant say much more except RIP Lauren, and im sorry for the loss
10/10 Keep ya head up

Daubs 05-08-05 06:00 PM

thanks for all the feed, its appreciated....uppinnnnnn for more.

Daubs 05-09-05 11:11 AM

uppin............

p4ntzistheish 05-09-05 03:40 PM

Man Daubs this was perfect...sorry to hear it man...damn don't wanna leave feed but it's the least I can do....10/10...perfection....

M-Eazy 05-09-05 03:45 PM

deep shit dawg...i was feelin it. a lotta emotion i sensed. 9/10

keep it up!

Daubs 05-10-05 05:14 PM

uppin..........


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