dreaming of the dark.
 

dancing evils flicker in the dim
where fantasie's and vision seep in..
my mind, i find beauty divine
a figure resting in a haven..
under entwining vines
swift action's grasp my eye
glazed pupil's stare..
at this figure dressed in light
environment is rich, almost heaven
but what is this?..
too pure for me to endeavour
i step to this being, and feel
air striking upon my face..
shot's of life take me, being forced to kneel
to this angel of sin, god's or the devil's?
this thought i revel..
ride the wing's of eternity, or experience sadistic peril's?
within the very thought, reality fit's my vision
dream or fantasy..
"light, dark" i find on my palm, incisioned.

i was bored, so i figured i'd key this up.

not bad for a key up! But format was slight off and vocab was ok. But we all need to work on that. ALL.

environment is rich, almost heaven
but what is this?..
^^Î liked this line alot. Made me think.
Sweft

Kinda Small Lines Not Alot said but It was Short and Sweet Like Sugar Canes LOL

Nice drop man Try to Expand your lines next time

thank's for the feedback.
upping.

word, this was pretty cool....nice little thing i like to call a ponder poem.....lmlo, i just made that up, but this indeed was a short, cool poem, keep up

ps, join my crew, poetry heads are dope, nah sayin?

Thank's for the feedback.
Up.

I like the format you used, it set the tone of this peom well, you have an extensive imagination, and it shows in your words, i enjoyed your style, and i like the metaphors..1

Upping this....

I'd like to bump this.

I like your writing style with the short lines, it gives it a more powerful and direct feeling. Imagery was great, nice emotion and found a good balance with your vocab. Keep it up man, good piece!