High Desire.
 

evil in my -dome-, rollin around thinkin can this be 'life'?/
crack your -chromozone- can this be 'right'/?
your wish was granted your sent to 'death', political volume loud with 'nazareth'/
short tales with a 'meaning', blowin chronic smoke, with my name still 'screening'/
words distorted and 'bleeding', as i sit in this smokey room 'thinking'/
moms gone from snake bites into her 'veins', venom took tha cells out her 'brains'/
she wasnt the one so far 'away' when hazing clouds crouded her 'taste'/
voodoo, with liqued tar in tha needle, she just fades away with heroin & no leidel/
something takes apart of 'free', chronic clouds and a true heart in 'thee'/
so grasp my hand and walk with 'me', as we stroll thru the streets of 'hell'/
were below while thier in heaven workin & doin 'well', |destruction and deaths smell/
in my head the 'demons', 'screamin' 'beast' nests are 'seedin' & 'breedin'/
dark possesive 'candles' take tha young womans life, with a cold breeze of street 'skandals'/
tha soulja of tha woman is getting older realizing what 'life is', satan & 'strife is'/
what is life and why did i come? satanic seyonces with cultish 'desire' but still im spittin words of 'iron'/
why now IM so far 'away'...no meaning to my life...no reason to 'stay'/



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u my rap type... but u still need sum structure and a lil mo flow.. yo vocab is perfect not much need ta improve

thx dawg ^
you fuckin ppl sleep hardcore.

yo this peice was aiight man.. u have good vocab.. structure a bit choppy but itll improve hope to see more chu..
rtf on my peices..