punches freestyle
 

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it's like im |shatterin bones| watchin em |collabin wit stones|, im |dastardly toned|
lyrically |attackin the home| of the mind, Im |jabbin ya dome| and rewind...

*cracks fist*

y'all spits is a 'disease' |anciently played| like hospital |patients wit 'aids'|
u couldn't think proper wit a 'hair on ya head' cuz ur rhymes is |blatantly 'shaved'|
Im 'attackin' like the |'war of the worlds'| and u smell |sure of a girl|
so if u |hit back| u get 'snapped' like |'knick knacks'| and |pour out ya hurls|
the way u lazy |wack cats| |rap back| is like u |'sleepin' on 'nyquil'|
and I show no love for u 'biters' cuz all u do is |receive and 'recycle'|
I'll create a grave for you and write he was wack on ur |epitaph|
and my flow is mind boggling so u'll prolly get 'amnesia' now|'remember' dat|
I spit meta6's, so im unlike the ordinary, im the |next level|
mattafact, im the guy 'fuckin u up' so much I seem like a |sex devil|
'this is how I do' cuz I got 'game' like im |'aftermath'|
u dickryders grippin each other's 'balls' so hard it's like a |'shaq' attack|
and I aint got nuttin else to say, so |fuck it|
u can be 'shocked' by this cuz am water and the flow is |conducted|...w/e

y'all spits is a 'disease' |anciently played| like hospital |patients wit 'aids'|
u couldn't think proper wit a 'hair on ya head' cuz ur rhymes is |blatantly 'shaved'|

AHA....I Liked Dat Shit.....But Ya Structure Is Ugh & You Kinda Stretched A Few Lines....Dont Force Shit You Got A Good Flow Tho

Return Da Favor.....Scream At Ack

uppin... .

^^^are you an alias?

an alias...? why?

just wondering if you're an alias?

was ok, structure needs huge elevation and some lines were played as fuck (aids)

some nice punches though, not hatin jus sayin.

drop some feed in sig if ya will.

uppin... .

blah....decent piece.....u had some played lines in there....

I spit meta6's, so im unlike the ordinary, im the |next level|
mattafact, im the guy 'fuckin u up' so much I seem like a |sex devil|
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'this is how I do' cuz I got 'game' like im |'aftermath'|
u dickryders grippin each other's 'balls' so hard it's like a |'shaq' attack|

^^^^played.............

then you had some good ones

y'all spits is a 'disease' |anciently played| like hospital |patients wit 'aids'|
u couldn't think proper wit a 'hair on ya head' cuz ur rhymes is |blatantly 'shaved'|
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and my flow is mind boggling so u'll prolly get 'amnesia' now|'remember' dat|

that was a nice line...overall it was a decent piece...its good to stay consistent through your drops...u got potential...just work on your structure..and stop puttin ur multis between | |.........its real annoying

overall/4/10

keep elevatin

^^ Pretty much what he said...

You've got mad potential fam, but you used too many played punches...Try being a little more creative with your lines...Structure needs alot of work as well...

No hate fam, just constructive critisism...

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uppin dis once more peeps...

-Eskalayde-

the way u lazy |wack cats| |rap back| is like u |'sleepin' on 'nyquil'|
and I show no love for u 'biters' cuz all u do is |receive and 'recycle'|

^^dat line was hot B.
overall im feelin da whole spit
punches and multis on point.

Basically what everyone else said. Decent though, I'm really feelin the multis and what not. Structure needs to be worked out like crazy though. And yeah, alot of the punches we're played and could have been worded better but overall it was a decent open mic. Return the favor on something on mine.

uppin... .

actually yo i liked this shit, i think if you keep workin on shit your gunna be on of the illest out there... good flow though i overall liked it